Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The matter of who has choice have been often discussed among generations of the past to present, while certain individuals believe that the new era got a lot of choices than the previous people. In my opinion, i strongly agree with the motion because the use of technology and having financial stability creates a lot choices.

In one hand, people with financial ability tend to have a many opportunities to travel round the global

On the other hand, modern technology has a greater influence on the people than the past. It jelp the individual to engage in the differ work at same time for instance, the use of computer helps people to work at home even

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 116 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, and the ideas presented are severely under-developed. While the student attempts to establish a position by stating, 'i strongly agree with the motion because the use of technology and having financial stability creates a lot choices,' the lack of sufficient length and extension pulls the score down significantly. Examples are introduced, such as financial ability for travel and modern technology for multitasking, but these points are left incomplete. Per the assessment criteria for under-length responses, Task Achievement is penalised for failing to fully develop the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay displays an attempt at logical progression by introducing separate points using transition phrases like 'In one hand' and 'On the other hand'. However, the cohesion is heavily disrupted by the incomplete nature of the response and abrupt endings within paragraphs, such as 'tend to have a many opportunities to travel round the global' and 'helps people to work at home even'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the severe truncation prevents a full evaluation of cohesive devices and overall text structure. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical usage pulls the score down to Band 4.0, as information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is basic and limited, featuring frequent word choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'The matter of who has choice have been often discussed', 'got a lot of choices', and 'differ work at same time'. The student attempts less common vocabulary items like 'financial stability' and 'modern technology', but these are undermined by noticeable errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'a many opportunities'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but vocabulary control is weak, and the inadequacy of the vocabulary range restricts the overall grade for this criterion to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and flawed complex structures. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the short text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('who has choice have been'), capitalization errors ('i strongly agree'), and incomplete prepositional phrases. Complex structures are attempted, such as 'while certain individuals believe that...', but they contain inaccuracies. Because errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader, and the range of structures is severely constrained by the length of the writing, the grammar score reflects these persistent limitations.

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