Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It has been observed that , in recent years, individual thinks that they have too numerous choices in their life .I strongly agree with this statment.My preference is justified in upcoming paragraphs with relevant explanation ad appropriate examples.
To begin with, in modern era, people believe they have to diffrent types of scope in their life.The foremost one is that , nowadays, technology is day by day increace and it is give many scope in people life .To elaborate, if individual want to choose in particular intreasted field ,they definetly choose this field and they can get knowledge because they have not presuure of their parents. For example, in past year, youngster alway panic about choose thier whetewar they want to do because there parents always pressure on particular choose field.In addition, in recent year , there are many opportunities available for the youngsters .By this I mean, recenly open many institute , many AI course as well as sports coaching classes .sometime people want to do achieve in sports field.so , at that moment they choose sports filed and they gain knowledge about there intrest sports such as cricket , football, tennis and many more.
Furthermore, some people like to do education with part time job.This is because, nowadays individuls become more independent .Thwy believe they can learn with get money for work in particular job institute. For instance, if people go to college in the morning they can essilly work in the evening and get knowledge about the how to contribute with others and their improve management skill as well as communication skill.Additionally, they have to freedom of their life as compared to the past years people.
On the contrary, there are some reasons why i disagree with this statement.Te foremost one is that if people have to more choice in their life so, it is not good for them because they can not achieve somethimg they want to do . This is beacause, the can not concentrate essilly in thier life. For example , sometimes youngesters have a lots of freedom so they can not focus on thier study and they can not success in thier life.
To conclude,there are some disagree points .Such as , they can not achieve in their life and they have a lots of freedom . Apart form that , there are some agreements point. Which i agree with this view .Firstly, people become more independent and they can work and study together. They can improve their management and communication skills.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing whether we have too many choices today, taking a clear stance in strong agreement, and later touching upon counter-arguments. However, the development of ideas is uneven and somewhat confused by the sudden inclusion of a contradictory viewpoint in the fourth paragraph ('On the contrary, there are some reasons why i disagree with this statement'), which detracts from a consistently maintained position. While some examples are provided, such as AI courses, sports coaching, and part-time jobs, they are frequently underdeveloped and repetitive. The overall treatment of the prompt leans towards a Band 5 or 6, as the ideas are sometimes unclear and the position becomes blurred at the end, yet it still manages to address the central theme.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and cohesion are frequently hindered by mechanical transitions and poor sentence-level linking. Devices such as 'To begin with', 'To elaborate', and 'Furthermore' are used, but they often precede convoluted arguments. Paragraphing is attempted, but the inclusion of the counter-argument right before the conclusion without proper integration disrupts the overall progression. Referencing pronouns (e.g., 'they', 'there') are occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track the subjects being discussed. Cohesion overall is faulty and mechanical, placing this text firmly in the Band 5 category.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors. For instance, the student writes 'too numerous choices', 'diffrent types of scope', and 'get money for work'. There are also frequent spelling and morphological errors such as 'increace' instead of 'increasing', 'intreasted' instead of 'interested', and 'youngesters'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a rudimentary message, the heavy reliance on elementary words and persistent inaccuracies constrain the score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay, characterised by a very limited range of structures and frequent intrusive errors. Simple sentences often contain basic structural flaws, such as 'individual thinks that they have too numerous choices' (subject-verb agreement and singular/plural mismatch). Attempts at complex sentences result in severe errors in syntax and punctuation, such as 'if individual want to choose in particular intreasted field ,they definetly choose this field'. Punctuation is also erratic, with spaces frequently misplaced before commas and periods. These dense, frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level of accuracy.
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