Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

We are living in modren age where we have alot of flaxiblities therefore, some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. I completely agree with that because of our modernisam we have alot of choices in al the field of life.

In this modren age nothing is impossible to do. we have variety of all the things which we use in our daily life.From a niddle to a car everything have different vrities.for example,if i want to buy a car there are planty of varieties in car such us SUVs, sedans and sports cars. Even there varieties also have different campenies.Futhermore,even if i am going to buy a thooth paste it also have many types.

however,all the things in this world have pros and cons.Although we have many choices,it is wastage of time.when we want to buy a goods in an argent condition initially we want to chack which one is oriegnal and which one is fake. As a result we have wastage of time.On the other hand, planty fake thing are avialable in our markets and shop.even madicans also have their fake raplicas.This fake thing are to mach dangerous for us.for example,if someone buy a beauty product and it is not oriegnal it is much dangerous that it will hurt their face and also make a swalling.

for conclusion, there are planty of choices for us however,we want to chack the best and safe one.if we dont check these things it is also dangerous for us so we want to use only that things which is oriegnal and trusted.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt regarding whether we have too many choices today, and the student clearly takes a position of complete agreement. The ideas presented are relevant, noting that everything from cars to toothpaste offers an abundance of options and brand varieties. Furthermore, the writer explores the negative consequences of this phenomenon, specifically the wastage of time and the prevalence of fake, dangerous products like replica medications or faulty beauty items. However, while the ideas are relevant, they remain somewhat limited and under-developed due to a lack of deeper elaboration and specific real-world examples beyond general categories. The conclusion is also quite brief and slightly repetitive. Overall, the response meets the requirements of Band 5, as it addresses the task and presents a clear position, but the development of ideas is restricted and lacks full extension.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates a basic overall arrangement with clear attempts at paragraphing, moving from an introduction to body paragraphs discussing varieties and disadvantages, followed by a conclusion. However, there are significant cohesion and organizational flaws. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, as seen in the overuse of expressions like 'for example' and punctuation errors such as missing spaces after commas and periods. Paragraphing is also poorly managed, with the second body paragraph merging distinct points about disadvantages, fake products, and safety into a single dense block. Referencing and logical progression are occasionally unclear, preventing the text from flowing smoothly. These features place the response firmly at Band 5, where there is some organisation but clear deficiencies in cohesive management and logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is limited and heavily impacted by frequent spelling errors throughout the text. Examples of misspelled words include 'modren' instead of modern, 'alot' instead of a lot, 'flaxiblities' instead of flexibilities, 'modernisam' instead of modernism, 'niddle' instead of needle, 'vrities' instead of varieties, 'planty' instead of plenty, 'campenies' instead of companies, 'thooth paste' instead of toothpaste, 'argent' instead of urgent, 'chack' instead of check, 'oriegnal' instead of original, 'avialable' instead of available, 'madicans' instead of medicines, 'raplicas' instead of replicas, 'mach' instead of much, and 'swalling' instead of swelling. Despite these limitations and spelling errors, the vocabulary is minimally adequate for conveying basic ideas about product choices and counterfeit goods, fitting the Band 4 descriptor where basic vocabulary and frequent errors strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing connectors and dependent clauses such as 'Although we have many choices, it is wastage of time' and 'if i want to buy a car there are planty of varieties'. However, control over grammar and punctuation is weak, with frequent errors occurring across nearly every sentence. There are persistent capitalization issues, missing articles (e.g., 'it is wastage of time'), incorrect verb forms and agreements (e.g., 'everything have different vrities', 'fake thing are to mach dangerous'), and run-on structures. These errors frequently impede communication and require the reader to decode the intended meaning. The grammatical control and high frequency of errors align with Band 4 descriptors, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning or hinder comprehension.

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