Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is frequently argued that in recent days several individuals think we have a lots of alternatives. I firmly agree with the statement because people are became wealthy than the past.

There are many reasons why people has too many choices. The main reason is that people try to purchase new things. To be more exact, if our digital devices or any other things get damaged, we will purchase new one instead of repairing. If we look at the last 15 years, we have been seen that people try to repair their damaged things even twice or quarter times. However, currently people tend to buy new one.

Furthermore, most of the people are impoverished also, so they repair their necessary things

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your response responds to the task only minimally, and your writing is significantly under the required word count minimum of 250 words, reaching only 121 words. You present a basic position that you agree with the statement because people have become wealthier, but your ideas remain extremely limited and under-developed. For instance, your explanation of why people buy new digital devices instead of repairing them touches on the topic, but it lacks sufficient extension, and your essay breaks off abruptly in the middle of a sentence at the end. To improve towards higher bands, you must ensure you meet the minimum word count requirement and fully develop your main ideas with detailed explanations and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Your essay displays basic organization, attempting to separate your introduction and body points into paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression or logical development throughout the text. While you attempt some basic linking words such as 'Furthermore' and 'However', your cohesive devices are often repetitive or inaccurately used, and referencing is occasionally unclear. Furthermore, your response is far too short to establish effective paragraphing and text structure. To achieve a higher band, you need to structure your ideas logically with a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs, and a conclusion, using a wider variety of cohesive devices smoothly to connect your thoughts.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic and repetitive vocabulary throughout your response, such as 'things', 'people', and 'buy', which restricts your ability to discuss the topic with precision. There are noticeable errors in word choice and phrasing, including 'in recent days' instead of 'nowadays', 'a lots of alternatives', and 'twice or quarter times'. These lexical slips are sometimes noticeable, though they do not completely impede communication. To lift your score in this criterion, you should expand your range of vocabulary by incorporating less common lexical items and precise collocations related to consumerism and modern lifestyles, while paying closer attention to accurate word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your writing demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors when attempting slightly more complex forms. There are frequent grammatical mistakes, such as subject-verb agreement errors ('people are became', 'people has'), tense usage issues ('we have been seen'), and missing plural markers or articles. These errors can cause some difficulty for the reader and distract from the clarity of your message. To improve your grammatical range and accuracy, you should practice using a balanced mix of simple and complex sentence structures while minimizing basic errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles.

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