Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today,s fast paced world,there are many opportunities for peoples to choose right profession for their better future and as we know every profession have too much choices every person choose that degree which has an alternative choice to save a considerable time to enhance their knowledge and within a few month they got a good skill. On the one hand, some people choose medical fields like Bachelor of dental surgery after Intermediate it is a 4 year degree programme but some people did not choose that degree because they have an alternate options of dental hygiene so some people go with shortcuts and sometimes, its is better for those who want some good skills and degree. but,some people do not look what they are continuing they want almost everything in choices. on the other hand, there is a significant change in now a days people have a option in every aspect of life not in just study or courses but now, in phones,car houses,shopping malls,acadmies almost everything what they want some people specially hired a professional architecture for the ready made maps if they have another option they may made from Ai. From my perspective, i totally agree with this statement in this era mankind made the life more easier not just before, but after each and everything changed from time to time and advanced. To sum up, these choices give us the positive effect on almost every person and these are particularly very significant in every phase of life for the right choice of profession career lifestyle etc.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view in the conclusion—“I totally agree”—and your examples about education, phones, cars and housing are relevant to the topic of choice. However, the position is not consistently explained: the opening focuses on career opportunities, while the later examples broaden the discussion without showing clearly why these choices are excessive or how they affect people. The dental-surgery and dental-hygiene example could support your argument, but the comparison is difficult to follow and is not developed with a specific consequence. To strengthen the response, explain what “too many” choices means, give reasons for your agreement, and develop each example by showing its effect on decision-making or people’s lives.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body sections signalled by “On the one hand” and “on the other hand,” and a conclusion, so there is some visible organisation. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because ideas shift quickly from professions to courses, then to consumer goods and architecture, without clear links explaining how each supports the main position. Several sentences are very long and combine multiple points, making relationships between ideas unclear. The contrast marker “On the one hand” is also not followed by a clearly contrasting position. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons, begin each with a focused topic sentence, and connect examples explicitly to your argument rather than relying mainly on basic sequencing phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “profession,” “alternative choice,” “significant change,” and “lifestyle,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended meaning hard to identify. For example, “every profession have too much choices” and “people have a option in every aspect” show problems with word forms and collocation, while “go with shortcuts” does not clearly express the intended idea. Spelling and word formation errors such as “acadmies” and “fast paced” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing choice, such as “a wide range of options,” “make an informed decision,” and “decision-making,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic linking structures, but the range of sentence forms is limited and complex attempts are often difficult to control. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “every profession have” and “some people did not choose,” while articles and plurals are inaccurate in “a option” and “an alternate options.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also frequently unclear: the opening sentence runs through several ideas, and commas are often missing or misplaced. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas using accurate clauses; check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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