Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an argument on the statement that at present, there are many options for the people before taking any decision. I totally agree with the statement and this essay will discuss the topic and opinion.

To begin, nowadays, individuals has a many choice in the shopping. There are many online platforms which can help them to have a huge varities of clothes. For example, Online application such as meesho has a different product which one can look and before buying they can compare with other application. Not only, they can compare the prices, they had different various choices with colour and size. Also, there are various other choices one can have before buying products, they can return the items free of cost if they find it's not appropriate for them.

Furthermore, in past, people are not having a freedom to choice their own partern. In modern era, technology has developed much so people can use their phone to connect and talk with their loved owns. For instance, whatapp has an option to had a video call, so you can see and also talk with the person leaving in other country. As a result, people had a choice in selecting their partern by talking face to face.

In conclusion, although,in past people have limited choice with shopping and selecting their partern, with technology nowadays people can have a different source. However, there are some sectors where people cannot have their choice like medical. Individuals cannot make a choice and comfort in this area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the opening: “I totally agree,” and you give relevant examples involving online shopping and communication technology. These show how people can compare products, choose colours and sizes, and communicate with potential partners. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether there are *too many* choices: most examples show that choices exist, rather than explaining when their number becomes excessive or what effects this has. The final point about medical decisions is introduced but not explained, and it sits uneasily beside the earlier examples without clarifying your overall view. To strengthen the response, explain why the choices you describe are excessive, support that reasoning, and connect the conclusion more clearly to your stated agreement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. “To begin” and “Furthermore” signal the two main examples, and the shopping and communication ideas are grouped separately. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the shopping paragraph moves from product variety to price comparisons and returns without showing how these points support the claim that there are too many choices. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, such as “Not only” and “As a result,” and the conclusion introduces medical choices without preparing for that topic in the body. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example to your argument, and ensure the conclusion summarises ideas already developed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “online platforms,” “compare the prices,” “technology,” and “video call,” which makes the general subject understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and several inaccurate word choices or forms make parts difficult to interpret. For example, “a huge varities” and “different various choices” are imprecise, while “selecting their partern” appears to mean choosing a partner. “People are not having a freedom to choice” also shows difficulty selecting natural expressions. Spelling errors such as “whatapp” and “partern” further reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range for discussing choice and its consequences, and check spelling, word forms, and natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea in “if they find it's not appropriate for them” and a result clause beginning “As a result.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns, sometimes making meaning harder to follow. Examples include “individuals has,” “people are not having a freedom,” and “they had a video call,” where agreement, articles, or verb forms are inaccurate. The sentence beginning “Not only” is also incomplete in its construction, and punctuation is inconsistent, as in “although,in past.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and consistent tense, then build longer sentences from these reliable patterns.

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