Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In these days, a group in society think that we have lot of choices. I agree with this statement because everyone has number of choices in every aspect of life.

The mindset of having too many options is a form of freedom as a result, individual would be more free to do something what he/she want. In the current era, young people are more passionate than their parents and they don't have any worry about their career, which is choosed by their parents. They know what they want. We see many people who are huge famous in the young age in this era. For instance, Elon Musk, which is first trillionaire in the world, has a freedom to do what he want to do and than he become a CEO of tesla company and starlink.

In my opinion, people would know if they don't become what they want than life is not over there are multiple choices so, don't be worry about the future everything that you want will run towards you. You don't have to put such a huge effort for the any position. Just stay calm and see the situation. Nowadays, there are too many options in every industry. For example, in bussines field, there are multiple options such as tech marketing, BBA, fintech operator, financial administrator, master of bussines which means if someone could don't do what he would want in a specific than than there are many other option in this relative field.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that there are many choices in this current era so, don't be worry about profession.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear general position in the introduction and conclusion: you agree that people have many choices. The examples about career decisions and business-related study options are relevant to the topic. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether there are *too many* choices. Much of the discussion presents choice as freedom or reassurance, rather than explaining when an abundance of options becomes excessive or causes problems. The Elon Musk example is asserted rather than clearly connected to the effects of having many choices, and the advice that people need not make much effort is not supported. Develop one or two reasons in depth and explain how each supports your degree of agreement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. The paragraphs also contain examples related to career and business choices. However, progression within the body paragraphs is not consistently clear: the first moves from freedom to young people and then to Elon Musk without fully explaining the links, while the second shifts from reassurance about the future to a list of study and career options. Connect each example directly to a main point and organise the ideas in a clearer sequence. Linking expressions such as “as a result” and “for instance” are attempted, but some transitions are awkward or inaccurate, and repeated use of “so” makes cohesion feel repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “freedom,” “career,” “options,” and “financial administrator,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “huge famous,” “in the young age,” “tech marketing,” and “everything that you want will run towards you.” Spelling errors such as “bussines” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise phrases that express your argument, such as “well-known at a young age,” “career paths in technology or marketing,” and “opportunities may become available.” Check spelling and whether each phrase sounds natural in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “as a result” and a conditional idea beginning “if someone…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “a group in society think” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “which is choosed by their parents” has an incorrect verb form. In “if someone could don't do,” the conditional structure is not formed correctly. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and then add subordinate clauses; also check punctuation where two complete ideas are joined.

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