Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few people think that there are many options present to choose.I agree, in many fields there are multiple choices present in market due to high competition.

Nowadays,due to increase in the number of industries more new finish products introduce in markets.For example, in 2015 there were only one brand of cars in Pakistan,people did not have any other option then that. Due to that Government of Pakistan take some serious steps and made a leavy on cars by that reason many other brands introduce themself in market and got a good responce from end consumer in last decade.In many other fields there are new innovation occur like in garments,as compared to past there were few type of cloths were in shops made by same material, whereas now clothes made by different material such as synthetic,cotton and many more present in shops.People can decide it to purchase it according to there needs and seasons.

In the field of medical, with the passage of time new researches made by different scienticts like,In past for heart patient there were only option to cure was bypass however in present there are many options discover by doctors which are eco,angiography and stunts which are alternate to bypass.So in the field of health science many subsequents are present.It also higher the difficulty level for patients and doctors to choose but having more options is better then nothing.For example,due to higher demand of stone and marbel in the world China made a artifical stone which looks same as original,people who donot have much money to buy natural can easily afford manmade stone.

In conclusion,people of nowadays have much more options as related to past and consumer of today can purchase anything which they needed from any other country by reading its facts and figures through online applications.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people now have more choices, and you support this with examples from cars, clothing, medicine, and building materials. These examples are relevant and show an effort to address the question from several angles. However, the response focuses mainly on the increase in available products and treatments, rather than fully examining whether this amounts to “too many” choices. You briefly recognise a drawback when you say choice “higher[s] the difficulty level,” but this point is not developed or weighed against the benefits. Some examples, particularly the claims about car brands and medical treatments, would also benefit from clearer explanation and more precise support. Develop the meaning of “too many” and explain the consequences to make your argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs on consumer products and medicine, and a conclusion. The examples generally follow the topic of each paragraph, so the reader can identify the main areas you are discussing. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the medical discussion moves from heart treatments to the difficulty of choosing and then to artificial stone, which would fit better in a separate paragraph. Linking phrases such as “For example” and “In conclusion” help, but connections between claims are often abrupt, and some references are unclear, including “by that reason” and “it.” Group related examples together and use clearer transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “multiple choices,” “competition,” “different material,” and “alternate,” and you attempt some more specific terms such as “angiography.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general subject. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, as in “options present to choose,” “new innovation occur,” and “subsequents.” Spelling errors such as “responce,” “scienticts,” and “artifical” also make the writing less polished and can slow the reader. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for the effects of choice—such as “consumer decision-making” or “greater variety”—would help you discuss the question directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and you use examples and contrast, including “whereas now” and “however.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries recur. For example, “more new finish products introduce in markets” lacks an appropriate verb form, while “there were only one brand” has an agreement error. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the car example beginning “For example, in 2015…”. These issues sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check tense and subject–verb agreement.

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