Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A few individuals think that these days they have so many opportunities. I strongly agree with this statement as technology has developed consequently, opportunities of jobs, health care, travelling have increased. In this essay, i will discuss how facilities have rossen.

Science and technology give a lot of new things for working in almost every field of life. Computers have converted into laptops now, we can carry it in every place with us and can do work on it. Banks are big achivement of individuas for saving money. For instance, some office workers bring their gagets in home for work on weak ends. Through diggital banking we can transfer money in any time. For instance, an individual goes on holidays in mountains and there he needs money he can get through mobile banking app or ATM.

In the sence of work we made online shopping, working in another country through internet and travelling abroad for better future firsty platforms like ebbay on it we can sell products all over the world secondly, many companies from other countris give task as work in home. For instance, medical products manufacturers post adds on different platformes and get orders. For instance working at home my friend is a web dewloper he makes websites at home for many new as well as old coustmers and fulfilling his desires by earning huge amout.

In conclusion, from my perspective every one is taking benifites from mobiles, internet even students are getting help from chatgpt for compleating their work but it is a dubble eged sord always use it for positive work it can be harmful in some cases like addiction of it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that people now have many opportunities, and you give relevant examples involving digital banking, online work and shopping, and students using ChatGPT. These examples show an attempt to support your view with familiar situations. However, the response only partly addresses the specific idea of having “too many choices”: it mainly describes increased opportunities and benefits, rather than explaining whether the abundance of choices itself is excessive or what drawbacks it creates. The conclusion briefly mentions addiction, but this concern is not developed or connected clearly to your argument. To strengthen the response, explain what “too many” means, develop a reason for your degree of agreement, and support both benefits and possible disadvantages with clearer examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation. The examples also give the reader a sense of the areas you want to discuss. However, progression between ideas is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph moves from computers to banks and then holidays, while the second combines online shopping, overseas work, medical products and your friend’s web-development work. Linking phrases such as “For instance” are repeated, and some transitions do not show how one point relates to the next. The conclusion introduces students and addiction without preparing these ideas earlier. Group related examples under one main point, use topic sentences to guide each paragraph, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “digital banking,” “online shopping,” “platforms,” and “web developer,” which helps communicate your examples. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to follow, such as “roseen,” “gagets,” “coustmers,” and “dubble eged sord.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “opportunities of jobs” and “in the sence of work.” Aim to learn accurate topic-related collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for choice and opportunity—rather than repeatedly referring to technology and facilities—would also help you address the question directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a sentence beginning “as technology has developed” and examples introduced with “For instance.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear grammatical control. For example, “Computers have converted into laptops now, we can carry it…” joins two independent clauses with a comma, and “an individual goes on holidays… he needs money he can get…” has unclear clause boundaries. There are also recurring errors in articles, agreement and sentence construction, as in “in every place” and “every one is taking benifites.” Use shorter, complete sentences when needed, and practise joining ideas with accurate conjunctions and punctuation.

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