Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Agree: Oppurtunities, Freedom

Few members of society, think about they have numerous options.Think about huge number of choices, is positive .However, a person have too much choices whatever they want such as, education, job and business. I will be admire, of the following statement.

some people argue that, plenty of option can give freedom, before finalize the desicion. For instance, customers during online shopping they can see many products or its prices compare with the others product and purchase after evaluate. Such as, students have too much fields and universities they can easily select our study program. According to these oppurtunities, the concept of numerous choices is totally positive thinking. Under therse circumstances, I agree people have many options and that is beneficial for individuals.

In the recent decades, too many choices become a contentious topic. However, people raise a points.

they think that too much options stucks individuals and make confusion they face alot of difficilties while taking the desicion. For example, Students while choosing their field numerous programs are available so, students are confuse to shorlist or choose our fields. Same as, during shopping customers are nervous because alot of varieties are available then thwhich is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position in favour of having many choices, stating that these opportunities are “totally positive” and “beneficial for individuals.” The examples about online shopping and students selecting courses are relevant, and you also introduce the opposing view that too many options can cause confusion. However, the response addresses the issue only partially: the counterargument is left unfinished (“then thwhich is”), and neither side is explained in enough depth to establish a balanced, sustained argument. The conclusion is also missing. The response contains 198 words, below the required 250, which limits the space available to develop your reasons and examples. Complete the discussion, explain how you weigh the disadvantages against the benefits, and finish with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs: one presents benefits and another introduces the concern that choice can cause confusion. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “However,” and “According to these opportunities” show awareness of how ideas can be connected. Nevertheless, the overall progression is difficult to follow. The opening is unclear, the shift between viewpoints is abrupt, and the final example stops mid-sentence, leaving the argument without a complete ending. Some connections are also repetitive or awkward, and references such as “our study program” do not clearly match the people being discussed. Plan a simple sequence—position, supporting reasons, opposing view and response, conclusion—and ensure each paragraph develops one complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “options,” “freedom,” “universities,” “varieties,” and “confusion,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. There are also attempts at more formal expressions such as “contentious topic” and “under these circumstances.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning harder to understand: “I will be admire,” “stucks individuals,” and “shortlist or choose our fields” are examples. Spelling errors such as “Oppurtunities,” “desicion,” and “difficilties” are noticeable. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing choice, such as “make an informed decision” and “an overwhelming range,” and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason-and-example structure beginning “For instance” and a contrast introduced by “However.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms. However, errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and plurals are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “a person have too much choices” needs a singular verb and a plural noun, while “students are confuse” has an incorrect adjective form. The opening fragment, “Few members of society, think about they have numerous options,” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries carefully.

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