Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes, if you talk to me about thios topic i simply say " YES" because today we are living in the age of science. Everything is just at the moment occur. If you want to do something you have a lot of routes and paths, but if you have a talent and confidence as well as knowledge. And if i talk about Education Department, i think a student have a lots of opportunities, if you have a courage and determination to do something you can do anything you want. So do something extraordinary and prove youself infront of World. I already give the reasons if you have a talent and urge to do something so no one stops you to win this world. Use your mobile and technology related tools and devices for your positive benefits and in the future yoiu are the shining star. And do work smarter not harder because in th future you have to do something for your own future. And sometime at the same time i shortly disagree with that everyone has equal choices no because some talented peoples needs to suffer not because due to their talent but just because of their luck. so i give you a example that a talented student have a lot of opportunities but it upon him that what he choose according to his interest. In the end, i simply say that make yourself valuable and talented , opportunities is just at the footstep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear general response that you agree there are many opportunities today, especially in education and through technology. However, the task asks whether people have too many choices, and your discussion mostly shifts to having opportunities and succeeding through talent, confidence, and determination. The brief disagreement about unequal choices is not explained enough to clarify your overall position or address the idea of “too many.” The example of a talented student choosing according to interest is relevant but remains general and does not show how choices can be excessive or beneficial. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Develop both sides of your position with a specific example and explain why the number of choices is or is not excessive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence from your initial agreement, through education and technology, to a qualification about unequal opportunities and a concluding statement. Phrases such as “In the end” help signal closure. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and the ideas move abruptly between talent, education, technology, hard work, luck, and choice. Repeated links such as “and” and “so” do not always show the relationship between points, while “at the same time i shortly disagree” makes the shift in position difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for your main argument and qualification, and connect each example directly to the question of whether choices are excessive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “opportunities,” “determination,” “technology,” and “according to his interest,” which helps communicate your general ideas. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “Everything is just at the moment occur,” “win this world,” and “opportunities is just at the footstep.” Spelling errors, including “thios,” “youself,” and “yoiu,” also make the writing less clear. Aim for accurate collocations and vocabulary that directly describes choice, such as “a wide range of options,” “make an informed decision,” or “too many alternatives.” Proofreading for spelling and word forms would make your meaning easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using conditional clauses, for example, “if you have a talent and confidence,” and you use some simple sentences to express your view. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not controlled consistently. “Everything is just at the moment occur” has an incorrect verb form, while “a student have a lots of opportunities” contains agreement and number errors. The opening sentence also runs into a long sequence of clauses without clear punctuation, and “opportunities is” shows a further agreement problem. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with accurate subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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