Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Choices:

we have many choices

may be it correct

mau be it not correct

now dayes people have many choices means peiple may chose any one of many. Its correct because every person have his own idea may he go too good things or bad things.Because Allah have made men with many choices .Its his own will. Example: Nokia is one of the best company from 1990 to 2007 but after that it suddnely facr down fall. Because its CEO was not ready too change OS system of this company.When Apple lounged its brand then its CEO said that we can not change this. Because over OS system is best one. From this example its clear that every nperson have choices it might be respounsed immediantly or after loss.Nokia comany collepes because od the disision nof its CEO.

there are some thing there you found choices but at some places you would not have choices then what should person doo . Then there exist no any option with the person. He must be persestent and cope with his work.New English Language when iterduce then the people of sub countiond wan not want too read but. Its there own choice.But after some time people try too leran the English Language.

Conclusion: too sum up the whole story that choices are present to people or not. People have many choices. They might nave to chose best or bad things.

i am agreed that choices are always abaviblle too people its there own behalf.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a position—“i am agreed”—and attempt to support it with the Nokia example, linking the company’s decline to its CEO’s decision not to change its operating system. This is relevant to choices and consequences, but the response does not clearly explain whether people have too many choices, which is the specific issue in the question. The discussion shifts to whether choices are available at all, and the example about learning English is not sufficiently explained. Your conclusion repeats that people have choices without resolving the “too many” question. To strengthen the response, state your degree of agreement directly and develop two relevant reasons with clear explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic beginning, discussion, and conclusion, and words such as “Because,” “Example,” and “Conclusion” signal some relationships between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the opening lists opposing possibilities, the Nokia example is followed by a broad claim about individual choices, and the next paragraph shifts to situations with no options and English learning. Connections between these points are often unclear, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier statements. Organise the essay into paragraphs with one main point each, and use linking phrases to show how each example supports your position. Clearer references to what “this” or “there” means would also help readers follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “choices,” “CEO,” “change,” and “decision,” and the Nokia example gives you an opportunity to discuss business decisions. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, especially repeated forms of “choice,” “people,” and “good or bad things.” Several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “facr down fall,” “collepes,” and “abaviblle.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “there exist no any option” and “on their own behalf.” Build a more precise range for discussing choice and consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully. Using accurate phrases such as “available options” and “make an informed decision” would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Its correct because every person have his own idea” and the sentence explaining Nokia’s operating-system decision. However, control is weak across these structures, and errors frequently make the meaning harder to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent (“every person have,” “Allah have”), and verb forms and sentence construction are often inaccurate (“i am agreed,” “then there exist no any option”). Articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention, as in “one of the best company” and the run-on sequence around the Nokia example. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then connect them with conjunctions while checking agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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