Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some indviduals think that we have alot of choices in this era.It is not wrong if anyone in the society think that we have alot of opportunities for our future.

Firstly,this generation have a great number of career choices.If a person is unable and want to do work from home,he can easily do that.If a person is not willing to do a 9 to 5 job ,he may switch it into work from home.Alot of people are performing their work just by a single click.However,some business are getting run by a simple chat bot or a single website.For example: Famous clothing brands such as ZARA and SAPPHIRE ,they are just running by their websites.Websites collects order and then tells to the main bot and then all the processing is being done.

Furthermore,in todays era there a number of career counselours who guide the individuals for their better futures.With internet ,data,automation driving the global economy are the highest paying.the peoplr who has a great intrest in hacking and mobile phone,they have much more opportunities than a soiftware engineer.They can become cybersecurity analyst,AI engineer.As the climate is changing and the global trend toward sustaining the environment has increased.So,there is need of more and more Renewable Energy Engineer.

In conclusion,modern work is not limited to standard coroprate office.Whether remote roles,green energy initiatives,content creation provides more career opportunities to all of this.So in this era we have alot more opportunities than the previous ones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a generally positive position, arguing that people now have more career options, and the examples of remote work, online businesses, cybersecurity and renewable energy are relevant. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it discusses career opportunities rather than the broader idea of having “too many choices,” and does not explain whether this abundance is excessive or creates difficulties. The opening also says it is “not wrong” to think there are many opportunities, which does not establish a clear degree of agreement. The examples are often asserted rather than explained, particularly the clothing-brand website example. The response is also 10 words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, state your position directly and develop reasons that address both the number of choices and whether that number is problematic.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Furthermore,” and a conclusion. The career-related ideas are broadly grouped together, so the reader can follow the general topic. However, progression is limited: the first body paragraph moves from remote work to chatbots and clothing websites without clearly showing how these examples prove that people have too many choices. The second paragraph also shifts quickly from career counsellors to technology jobs and renewable energy. Linking phrases such as “So” and “For example” are used, but relationships between ideas are sometimes unclear or mechanical. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph one main reason, explaining each example, and using clear references to connect the sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “work from home,” “cybersecurity analyst,” “global economy” and “Renewable Energy Engineer.” These terms help communicate the focus on changing career options. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “a great number of career choices” is understandable but repetitive, while “all the processing is being done” is vague. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “indviduals,” “counselours,” “peoplr” and “soiftware,” and inconsistent forms such as “alot.” Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general words with specific terms will make your argument clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and some meaning is recoverable, for example in the sentence about people working from home. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation. Examples include “this generation have,” “some business are getting run,” and “Websites collects order,” where subjects and verbs do not agree. The sentence beginning “With internet, data, automation driving…” is incomplete or unclear, and “Whether remote roles, green energy initiatives, content creation provides…” has a faulty structure and agreement. Commas are often missing after introductory phrases, while spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation during revision.

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