Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

it was often argued that some people believe that nowadays there are too many choices to be done in my agree opinion.

firstly,looking at our world today work now is too much too the fact that there is no time to rest .

secondly,when one work morning ,evening at night the person will not even time to rest even to take care of him or herself will be a problem.

Thirdly, there have been too much choices like cleaning, cooking,washing, when one wake in the morning one will do all the house choice before anything to the extent that whwn one goes home after work tge person will not even know where to start doing or think of how to start the work.

finally ,how coices has happen many people alot to be ready for the future ahead and to be a matter wife in the family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

Your response takes a position in favour of the statement, signalled by “in my agree opinion,” and gives examples involving work and household duties. These points are relevant to the topic of having too many demands or choices, but the connection between them and the idea of having too many choices is not clearly explained. The final point about preparing for the future and being “a matter wife” is difficult to interpret, so it does not provide clear support. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words, leaving the argument substantially incomplete. To strengthen your answer, explain what choices people face, why there are too many, and develop each reason with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

You attempt to organise the response with “firstly,” “secondly,” “Thirdly,” and “finally,” which gives the reader some indication that you are presenting several points. However, the ideas do not build into a clear line of argument: the discussion moves from work hours to rest, then household chores, without explaining how each supports your position about too many choices. There are no distinct paragraphs to separate the introduction, supporting reasons, and conclusion. Some sentences are difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together, particularly the long sentence beginning “Thirdly.” Use a clear paragraph for each main reason, connect ideas with precise references, and finish with a brief conclusion that restates your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “choices,” “work,” “rest,” and “future,” and the examples of “cleaning, cooking, washing” help identify the domestic responsibilities you mean. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or forms make the intended meaning unclear. For example, “house choice” appears to mean “household chores,” while “a matter wife” does not communicate a clear idea. There are also spelling errors such as “whwn,” “tge,” and “coices.” Build a more precise range around the topic—for example, “options,” “responsibilities,” and “decision-making”—and check spelling and collocations carefully so your ideas are easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “when one goes home after work.” However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and several sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. For example, “when one work morning, evening at night” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “when one wake in the morning one will do” has subject–verb agreement problems. Articles and verb forms are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “the person will not even time to rest.” Punctuation and spacing after commas are inconsistent. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them using accurate clauses; check agreement, articles, and verb forms before submitting.

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