Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Topic: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Introduction:

The current studies explore the personal choices and perceptions of different person. This study discusse the importance of modernism choices.

Body paragraph 1.

in this sections, i agree with this statement, yes now_a _ days people have their different opinions. everyone is not fixed on one thing. i support my arguments with giving relevant evidence or references that is related with real world. for example, in past , students and parents have fixed their perceptions and thoughts if parents thought their children will become a doctor in future sometimes it may causes of alternative choices to their children might be possible the child want to become an engineer or develope any other designations. similarly, now a days people's immediately move towards new choices almost 3 years ago majorities of Pakistani people's got grades and want to pursue and doing job in that country but now this trend changes into foreign country. now everyone wants to go abroad for such different purposes. some are interested in settling there, some candidates are interested to pursue education and some are getting best opportunities there. so in this way people's frequently change their own choices.

body paragraph 2.

i disagree with little bit arguments , if People just listen and then follow prescription that woyld be not helpful for them because without any goal, any purpose life is incomplete. its just like a hollow cap.

coclusion:

finally i summaries my thoughts in this se ction peoplw must have their goals then they should change their choices.so they can achieve their perspective life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position by saying, “I agree with this statement,” and give relevant examples about students’ career choices and Pakistanis considering opportunities abroad. These examples show an attempt to explain how people’s options and preferences can change. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether there are too many choices: it mainly discusses changing preferences and migration, without explaining how the abundance of options itself affects people or why it is excessive. The second paragraph introduces disagreement but does not clearly qualify your overall position or support it with a developed example. State your degree of agreement clearly in the introduction, then explain and support each reason before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body sections and a conclusion, and the examples are broadly grouped by topic. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow because the first body paragraph moves from parental expectations to changing career plans and then to migration without clearly linking these points. The second paragraph begins, “i disagree with little bit arguments,” but its connection to the first paragraph and to your overall position is unclear. Linking phrases such as “for example” and “similarly” are attempted, but some do not show the precise relationship between ideas. Use paragraphs with one main point each, and make the contrast between your agreement and qualification explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “perceptions,” “alternative choices,” “pursue education” and “opportunities,” which helps communicate ideas about decisions and future plans. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “modernism choices,” “causes of alternative choices,” and “achieve their perspective life.” Repetition of “choices,” “people” and “now a days” also limits precision. Aim to use familiar vocabulary accurately before reaching for more formal expressions. Learning collocations such as “career options,” “make a decision,” and “pursue a degree” would help you express your examples more naturally and make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about what happens when parents choose a career for their children. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and punctuation sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “if parents thought their children will become a doctor in future sometimes it may causes” combines tenses and clauses inaccurately, while “people's immediately move” has an unclear subject–verb pattern. Some sentences also run together without clear punctuation. Practise building one complete clause at a time, then join clauses with accurate connectors; check subject–verb agreement and keep verb tenses consistent.

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