Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

From my perspective now days have many option for working or moving to other countries. So we now talk about working how much option available for peoples.

One students studying in university then his class started in 8 .a.m to 12 .a.m.

Then he after completed lecture he move to home. Then he have part time then join a online office and earn new skills related to our study. Then teaching new related to our study then his offer after some to makes a software or making new apps. When students study completed then he have many options for jobs or makes our self softwhare house.

We talk about other students same condition after compted lecture then he didn't do any work and just attended lecture after some he completed study. Then don't have to any work option then starting new skills then makes more time then after some year ago then he makes news skill. If students loyal our future or studying then focues started when he started studying.

From my perspective people have many option but don't wasting time. Now days many facilities to working. Because Ai available for working and many people used Ai making good jobs and earning goods money.

Online and physicals have many option for working, Now days if you think earn many is defficults so i thinks its not. My friends working after completed degree so now working our self he have make software house and making good many first time he go to jobs and parts he available in software house.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic by taking the position that people now have many choices, especially in work and education, and you give examples involving university students, online work, AI, and a friend who established a software business. These examples show an attempt to support your view. However, the response does not clearly explain how having many choices affects people or why this situation is beneficial or problematic. The discussion also shifts between students’ study habits and employment options without making the connection to the question explicit. Your position is only briefly stated in the opening and conclusion, and the reasons remain difficult to follow. Develop two relevant reasons, explain each one, and connect your examples directly to whether you agree that choices are excessive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and makes an effort to move from an opening view to examples and a conclusion. The student and friend examples provide some identifiable points of reference. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the first student’s study and work routine, the contrasting student, and the later comments about AI and online work are not linked into a sustained argument. Repeated sequencing phrases such as “then,” “after some,” and “now days” do not clearly show how ideas relate, and references such as “he” and “our” can be confusing. Use paragraphs for distinct reasons, begin each with a clear main point, and add linking language that explains contrast, cause, or result.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “part time,” “online office,” “skills,” “software,” and “AI,” so the reader can identify the general subject of work and study. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “many option” and “working” recurring, and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, such as “making good many” and “starting new skills.” Spelling errors including “softwhare,” “compted,” and “defficults” also reduce clarity. Aim to use more precise terms for the central idea of choice and employment, and check spelling and word forms. For example, describe the kinds of jobs available rather than repeating “options for working.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express sequences and conditions, for example, “When students study completed” and “if you think earn many is defficults,” but these structures are not controlled enough to communicate the intended relationships reliably. Many sentences have problems with verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction: “he have part time,” “he move to home,” and “people have many option” are examples. Some sentences are fragments or run together, particularly the long account of the first student’s routine. Most structures are simple, and attempts to combine ideas often lead to errors that obscure meaning. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one clause at a time using forms such as “After he completes his degree, he can…”

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