Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era people have lot of opportunities instead of past. They have many fields to work and make career in it. The new technology also make their work easier and simple.

In past decade people have not much opportunities for work and studies and their relative fields but now people think there are lot of new opportunities are formed. People have many new ways to work and learn. The best part is the technology which make their work easy and simple so people work with full concentration.

The students have also many opportunities relating to studies. They can ask to AI to find the problems and make it simple which is easy to understand. The employees can also get help from AI to make assinments

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify a relevant general view: modern people have more opportunities, particularly in work, education and technology. The examples of students using AI and employees receiving help with assignments begin to support this idea. However, the response does not clearly answer the question of whether you agree or disagree with having “too many choices”; it mainly describes increased opportunities and their benefits. There is also no developed discussion of possible disadvantages or a clear extent of agreement. The response is substantially below the required minimum length, so the ideas remain very limited and under-developed. State your position directly, then explain and illustrate at least two reasons that address whether the choices are excessive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces the topic, discusses opportunities in general, and then gives examples involving students and employees. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the progression is limited because the second paragraph largely repeats the first paragraph’s points about more opportunities and technology making work easier. Connections between ideas are also basic, with repeated use of “and” and “also,” and the final sentence ends without completing the point. To improve, organise each body paragraph around a distinct reason, use clear links to show how examples support that reason, and provide a concluding paragraph that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “opportunities,” “technology,” “career,” “students,” and “employees,” so the general subject is understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially the repeated references to “opportunities” and work being “easy and simple.” Some word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “relative fields,” “assinments,” and “make career in it,” which reduce precision. Aim to use a wider range of accurate expressions for choice and its effects, and check spelling and collocations. For example, you could distinguish between “career options,” “educational pathways,” and “decision-making,” rather than relying on the same general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and the main ideas can generally be understood. There is an attempt to form a longer sentence with “so” in “the technology which make their work easy and simple so people work with full concentration,” but the clause structure and verb agreement are not controlled. Other recurring errors include missing articles and incorrect agreement, as in “people have lot of opportunities” and “technology also make.” The past-time sentence “In past decade people have not much opportunities” also has problems with article use, tense and sentence construction. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and consistent tense before submitting.

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