Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern world, people's are injoying thier life very well. Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. I strongly agree with this statement and provide some relevant examples and personal experience.

On the one hand, education is most important thing in our life. Many poor families are not getting education or they think it is expensive, but we can have choice. There are many online platforms where we access from free knowledge. For example, Youtube and google, there are many recorded lectures on youtube where we can learn any time also from google, we can have any information related to eduction. In recent years, when this type of technology wasn't invented people have to practically present in class rooms.

On the other hand, experts are inovating new bike's and brand new car's. Thechnology is growing day by day. In addition, people who can't afford car's they are getting huge subsidy from government. Also in job sectors people who are highly educated they were getting jobs because job market was saturated, now many investors in India are building and starting their companies, so people are getting employement. Furthermore, governments are providing many facilities like public transport and metro trains, where lnments adies are having 50% discount on travelling tickets.

To conclude, I firmly believe people have many choices nowadays so they should take benefits. Governments are helping people to start their own business so people should grow in their life and be confident.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear position—“I strongly agree”—and give examples involving online learning, transport and employment. These are relevant to the topic of choice, but the response only partially develops the argument: it does not explain clearly how these examples demonstrate that people have too many choices, rather than simply more opportunities or services. The discussion of government subsidies and job creation is also difficult to connect to your main claim. The conclusion repeats your view but does not weigh the examples or explain the effects of having many options. The response is 236 words, so it is 14 words below the 250-word minimum; the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main point with a clearer explanation and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, the paragraphs do not consistently build a clear argument: the first moves from education to online platforms, while the second shifts among vehicles, subsidies, jobs and public transport without explaining their connections. Some linking phrases, such as “In addition” and “Furthermore,” introduce new points but do not show how they support the central claim. Improve progression by giving each paragraph one main reason, then explaining and illustrating it; use references such as “this access” or “these options” to make links between sentences clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “online platforms,” “recorded lectures,” “job market,” “investors” and “public transport,” which helps communicate your examples. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and form errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “injoying,” “Thechnology,” “employement” and “lnments adies.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “take benefits” and “people are getting huge subsidy.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language for the essay question—such as “a wider range of options” and “decision-making”—would also help you explain whether choice is beneficial or excessive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, for example, “There are many online platforms where we access from free knowledge” and the sentence beginning “Also in job sectors…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, tense and sentence boundaries can make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “people's are,” “education is most important thing,” and “people have to practically present in class rooms.” The sentence about jobs shifts from “people…were getting jobs” to “now many investors…are building,” making the time relationship unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, and check subject–verb agreement, articles and consistent tense.

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