Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, some people believe that there are so many carrier opportunities on the modern world. I competly agree with this because individuals can choose favourite fields and bulit a successful future for their families and yourself.

On the one hand, technology has become a significant part of everyone's life. Now, people can get opportunity to chooset the interested field where they worken with full of concentration and feel comfortable. Moreover, who people work in factories,workplace and

in resturants at the lowest post so now thay have chance to choose better field and struggle on study with comcentration for enhance thair life style. Afterwards, getting best experince in favourite feild they can get jobs as resutrant manager and assitant helper. For example, employees who recieve a higher salary can save money for emergencies and for their future effectively.

On the other hand, people who choose another field thay have a chance to provide better opportunities for their families. In many nations, especially in developing countries, their govrnemnts allow students to choose another by providing scholarships and free books. However, parents cannot afford their high quality education. In adition, people who perform both study and employment so, they manage personal expence. people with higher earning can save money to buy house or start bussiness.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that people focuson to choose another field because it provide better job opportunity and finicilal satisfaction. And a good income make a substantial difference toa person life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that people have many choices, and you mention career selection, education, family prospects and income. However, the response only partially addresses the actual question because it focuses almost entirely on career opportunities, rather than considering the broader idea of having too many choices or explaining whether an excess of choice can create problems. Several points are also unclear or insufficiently supported, such as the claim that technology enables people to choose a field and the example about restaurant managers and assistant helpers. The response is six words below the required minimum, which further limits the space available to develop your reasons. To strengthen the answer, explain what “too many choices” means and develop a relevant example for each main reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some guidance through your ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from technology to factory work, studying, restaurant jobs and saving money without clearly showing how each point supports the argument. Some links are also unclear, including “Afterwards” and “However,” which does not express a clear contrast in its context. The conclusion repeats the general position but does not bring the reasons together. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it in sequence, and use linking expressions only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary related to work, education and finances, including “scholarships,” “emergencies,” “higher salary” and “substantial difference.” These choices show some ability to discuss the topic, but the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, for example “carrier opportunities,” “resturants,” “finicilal satisfaction” and “focuson.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “choose another field” and “lowest post.” Aim to use accurate, topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general references to “field” and “opportunity” with precise terms for career options, education access and employment prospects would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer structures, including “In many nations, especially in developing countries, their governments allow students to choose another by providing scholarships and free books.” However, the range remains limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete. Examples include “who people work in factories,” “people who perform both study and employment so, they manage personal expence,” and “a good income make a substantial difference toa person life.” These show problems with clause construction, agreement, articles and possessives. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly where ideas run together. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking that each clause has a complete and grammatically connected meaning.

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