Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now a days too many people believe on that thing that they have too much choices to do in thins world nowadays such as they think that people have to much opportunites to do in this era of life but i am totally disagree with that statement because of one thing now a days people have very good talent and aslo good degrees but i see that they are always free they do not have any job to do this is because of job lessness everyone is studing in uvinersities and attatin there degree after that they will not able to found a job to do most of them try to move obroad for job as well as better studies but in there own country they do not found any job people have such choises to do in there life but a regular job they will not found in there own hometown

Now a days people have learn online skills such as online earning with that they will aslo attain a good sorce of income most of the people are doing this now a days aslo some people if they have any skill they are maintaing that skill towards people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“i am totally disagree”—and discuss employment and online skills, which are relevant to choices in modern life. However, the response only minimally answers the question: it does not clearly explain whether people have too many choices overall, and the examples mainly argue that jobs are scarce rather than examining the range of choices. The point about online earning is introduced but not explained or linked to your position. The response also contains 200 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250. To strengthen your answer, explain what kinds of choices people face, give specific examples, and develop how these support your level of agreement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic line of thought: you first discuss employment opportunities and then mention online skills as another possible source of income. This gives the response some organisation, and phrases such as “because of” and “after that” attempt to connect ideas. However, nearly all the writing is presented as one long paragraph, with very long sentences and few clear transitions. The relationship between having many choices and being unable to find a job is not made explicit, so the argument is difficult to follow. The second point about online skills also ends without a clear conclusion. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each main reason, and a conclusion, and connect each example directly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “opportunities,” “degree,” “job,” “online skills,” and “source of income,” so the general subject can be understood. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word forms that make reading harder, such as “thins,” “opportunites,” “job lessness,” and “attatin.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, including “maintaining that skill towards people” and “too much choices.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing employment and choice, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise wording would help you express the distinction between having many options and having access to suitable opportunities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express connected ideas using clauses with “because,” “after that,” and “if,” but sentence structures are very limited and often run together. Errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “i am totally disagree” has an incorrect verb form, while “people have to much opportunites” has problems with determiner and plural agreement. In “they will not able to found a job,” the modal construction and verb form are inaccurate. Capitalisation and punctuation are also largely absent, creating long, unclear sentences. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate conjunctions; check subject–verb forms, articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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