Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I strongly agree with this statement. Nowadays, some people believe that we have a lots of choice to do something in our daily life.

On the one hand, if we wants opportunity for anything we can easily found in locality as well as social media also. It's provide lots of opportunities for all over the world. In addition, we gain more experience and knowledge. However, we can decided our own life according to own choice. For instant, people who got their opportunity can easily make them independent and experience person.

On the other hand, have to many choices can makes people more confident and comfortable the way they want in their life. If we have numerous option we can select what we need to do in life added a new option can change their whole life by taking own challenge. However, we don't need to independent in our own life. In addition, we don't have to got any limit choice. For example, if we all achieve our own choice of life hleps to know more information about everything and gain more experience than limit choice.

To slum up, all individual can select their choice by confidently, having a lot of options in our life to do something is makes people more confident and gain more knowledge of what they want to know and what they want to do so, if we select our own choice can change our life with convenient and comfiwl

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position at the start—“I strongly agree”—and return to the idea that choices can bring confidence, independence, and experience. However, the response only minimally answers the specific question about whether people have too many choices: most of the essay argues that having many options is beneficial, without explaining whether the number of choices can become excessive or why. Several points, such as “we don't need to independent,” are unclear or conflict with your main position, and the examples remain general rather than showing a specific situation. The response is also 7 words below the required minimum. To develop the task more fully, explain both the benefits and possible drawbacks of abundant choice, then support your view with a clear, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay has a basic structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the two body paragraphs do not establish a clear contrast, and several points appear disconnected or contradictory. For example, “we don't need to be independent” does not clearly connect to the surrounding argument about choice. “However” is also used where the relationship between ideas is not clear. The conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the argument together. Use one paragraph for benefits and another for drawbacks, link each example directly to its main point, and use fewer, more accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “opportunity,” “independent,” “numerous option,” and “experience,” so the reader can identify the general subject of your argument. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling that sometimes strain understanding. Examples include “a lots of choice,” “found in locality,” “limit choice,” and the misspellings “hleps” and “comfiwl.” Some phrases, such as “experience person,” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing choice, such as “a wide range of options,” “decision-making,” and “feel overwhelmed,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including conditional forms such as “if we have numerous option we can select…” and a concluding sentence that tries to connect several ideas. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors include subject–verb agreement (“if we wants,” “choices can makes”), verb forms (“we can decided,” “we can easily found”), missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“a lots of choice,” “numerous option”), and incomplete constructions such as “we don't need to independent.” These errors recur and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea at a time, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their verb forms and agreement.

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