Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in billion kWh by the top ten ranked countries in 2014.

Overall, China was the biggest producer and consumer of electricty. USA was second in the list whereas Korea Republic is ranked as 10th. Germany was the only country with more consumption then its production.

China was leading the chart with 5,398 of production and 5,322 billion kWh of usage. USA was saving the most electricity compare to all ten countries with 4,099 and 3,866 billion kWh of production and consumption respectively. Together China and USA were way ahead of other eight countries in terms of both usage and development of electricity. After a massive gap Russia was producing and consuming 1,057 and 1,038 respectively.

Japan and India were producing 936.2 and 871; consuming 856.7 and 698.8 respectively. Canada was the 6th ranked country with saving of 119 kWh billion electricity with 618.9 production. France and Brazil were quite similar in terms of consuming electricity with 462.9 and 455.8 of usage but France was producing 561 (31.5 billion kWh more than Brazil).

Germany is the only country in these top ten ranked countries which was having more usage then what they produce. Germay produces 526.6 and use more 55.9 billion kWH.Finally, Korea is in the last with 485.1 and 449.5 billion kWh of production and consumption respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China and the United States dominate both measures, Russia follows after a large gap, and Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. Most figures you report are consistent with the chart, including the comparisons for China, Japan, India and Korea. However, some details are unclear or imprecise: “USA was saving the most electricity” is not a suitable description of the production–consumption difference, and the Canada comparison would be clearer if you gave its consumption figure as well as the 119-billion-kWh gap. The France–Brazil production comparison is also inaccurate: France’s figure is 561.2, which is 30.5 higher than Brazil’s 530.7, not 31.5. The overview is relevant, but some selected comparisons need fuller, more precise reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that move from the largest producers to the smaller-ranked countries. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow, and phrases such as “After a massive gap” help signal the sharp difference between the United States and Russia. However, the progression within the final paragraph is somewhat crowded, as France, Brazil, Germany and Korea are covered in quick succession. Some linking and reference choices are also awkward, such as “with 4,099 and 3,866 … respectively,” where the relationship between the figures could be stated more directly. Grouping countries more consistently and using clearer transitions between comparisons would make the cohesion less mechanical and the information easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranked,” “massive gap” and “respectively,” so the chart is generally understandable. However, several choices are imprecise or informal for an academic report. “Saving the most electricity” does not accurately describe the difference between production and consumption, while “usage” and “use” vary from the chart’s more precise term, “consumption.” Phrases such as “was leading the chart” and “way ahead” are also less suitable than neutral reporting language. There are spelling errors, including “electricty” and “Germay,” and some awkward collocations such as “with saving of 119 kWh billion electricity.” More consistent, precise vocabulary would improve clarity and academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some more complex structures, including the overview sentence beginning “Germany was the only country…” and comparisons using “whereas” and “but.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “more consumption then its production” has an incorrect comparative construction, and “what they produce” shifts tense within a past-data report. In “Germany … was having more usage then what they produce,” the clause structure and tense are not well controlled. The final sentence also runs together after “kWH.” Aim to maintain past tense consistently, form comparisons accurately, and punctuate sentence boundaries carefully. These improvements would make the range of structures you attempt more controlled.

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