Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart demonstrates the production and consumption of electricity of the top ten countries in the year 2014. The figure are given in numbers.

Overall, China experienced the highest rank in the generation and usage of electricity, followed by United States was the second highest. Meanwhile the Korea is encountered the most lowest ratio in the figure.

Initially, China has the higher output of electricity having the value 5,398 billion kWh and demand 5,322 billion kWh. On the other hand USA also has second good experienced in electricity the value of generation was 4,099 (billion kWh) and 3,866 (billion kWh). After that, the rank of Russia were 1,057 (billion kWh) and 1,038 (billion kWh).

Now looking to Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and germany, this all countries also experienced decline having minor numbers of changes in the figure respectively. Lastly, The Korea had the most lowest rank in the production of electricity having value 485.1 billion kWh and consumption 449.5 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main leaders accurately: China is highest in both production and consumption, the United States is second, and Korea has the lowest production figure. You also report the figures for China, the United States and Russia correctly. However, the overview is incomplete and some details are unclear: Korea is not the lowest in consumption, as Germany’s consumption is higher than its production and exceeds Korea’s. The statement that the other countries show a “decline” with “minor numbers of changes” does not explain their relative levels or the notable Germany exception. To strengthen the response, compare the middle-ranking countries more specifically and distinguish production from consumption when describing the lowest values and overall patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to selected figures and then the remaining countries. Sequencing phrases such as “Initially,” “After that,” and “Lastly” help signal this order. However, progression is often mechanical, and the final group of six countries is compressed into one vague sentence rather than organised around meaningful comparisons. Some links are also awkward: “On the other hand” suggests a contrast between China and the United States, although the point is that the latter ranks second. Use clearer grouping—for example, the two leading countries, the middle group, and the lower figures—and connect ideas through comparisons rather than a list of sequence markers. This would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “generation,” “demand,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “second good experienced,” “most lowest ratio,” and “experienced decline” are not natural ways to describe rankings or figures. “The figure are given in numbers” is also vague and adds little information. Aim for precise reporting language such as “ranked second,” “recorded the lowest production,” and “figures were lower.” Check country-name capitalization, particularly “Germany,” and avoid using “ratio” when you mean an amount or value.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. These include subject–verb agreement in “The figure are given” and “the rank of Russia were,” as well as tense and article problems in “China has the higher output” and “the Korea had.” The sentence beginning “Now looking to Japan…” is not a complete, well-formed construction, and “this all countries” shows difficulty with demonstratives and plural nouns. These errors sometimes make relationships between the figures harder to understand. Practise accurate sentence patterns for comparisons, such as “China produced…, while its consumption was…,” and check agreement, articles, and tense in each sentence. More controlled complex sentences would also improve grammatical range.

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