Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graph depicts how much electricity produced and consumed by the to ten nations in 2014.

On the the hand, China is dramatically more then other country in both production and consuming electricity in 2014 it was 5,398 in production and 5,322 in consumption. Although, Korea, Rep. is extremely low in in both consuming and producing. In production it was 485.1 and 449.5 in consumption.

On the other hand, if we compare rest if the nations the United states holds second position in the chart. In production it was 4,099 and 3,866 in consumption. Whereas, rest all other nations are significantly lower then these two nations China and United states.

Continuingly, Russia is at 1,057 in production and 1,038 in consumption. However other six nation are rationally same. Such as japan at 936.2 and 856.7 at both, India at 871 and 698.8 at both, Canada at 618.9 and 499.9 at both, France at 561.2 and 462 at both, Brazil at 530.7 and 455.8 at both, and at last Germany at 526.6 and 582.5 at both production and consumption.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main extremes accurately: China leads both measures, the United States is second, and Korea has the lowest production. Most figures are also reported correctly, and the comparison that the two leading countries are far ahead of the others is relevant. However, the overview is not clearly separated or fully developed, and the response mainly lists figures rather than selecting the most significant patterns. The statement that the other six nations are “rationally same” is unclear and overlooks meaningful differences; Germany is also an exception, as its consumption exceeds its production, unlike the other countries. Make this contrast explicit and summarise the overall pattern before giving selected details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from China and Korea to the United States and then the remaining countries, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these groups. However, progression is not consistently clear: “On the one hand” is not balanced by a meaningful opposing point, while “On the other hand” and “Continuingly” do not accurately signal the relationships between the information. The final paragraph becomes a long list, making comparisons harder to follow. Group the countries by clear patterns—for example, the two leaders, the middle-ranking countries, and Germany’s unusual consumption figure—and use straightforward links such as “By comparison” or “In contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “production,” “consumption,” “position,” and “compare,” so the reader can understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “dramatically more then other country” and “extremely low in in both consuming and producing” are not natural ways to describe the data; “rationally same” does not convey the intended comparison. There are also repeated forms such as “at both” and “in production.” Aim for precise chart language and vary expressions for increases, rankings, and similarities. Check spelling and capitalization in country names and common comparative words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “Whereas,” but these are often incomplete or incorrectly connected. For instance, “Although, Korea, Rep. is extremely low…” is not a complete contrast clause, and the opening sentence is missing a clear verb construction (“how much electricity produced and consumed”). Errors also occur with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the to ten nations” and the run-on sentence after “in 2014.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate contrast clauses and check punctuation.

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