Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart illustrate how the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

In the China 5,322 electricity consumption. Moreover, china more use electricity. Other way, second united states more use electricity. As regards both country more consumption electricity due to make heavy products. Third country russia consume electricity 1,038 consumption. However, which country use more electricity for production, in this way pay lot money in bills.

Other, countrys such as india canada france brazil germany korea,rep also detials show in chart.

The initial figure show that electricity is very important factor today. Today every system such as, factors, cars, meachines depend upon electricity. Moreever, this countrys depend electricity Therefore, electricity produce by many way. Electricity produce by water, air, petrole.

Fact that, we produce electricity cheap way. Because, our induastries and all machines rely on electricity. Our econemy depend on this. Summarize the information.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and mentions China, the United States and Russia, but it does not adequately summarise the main features or compare production with consumption. For example, China’s figures are given only as consumption, and the claim that the United States “more use electricity” is not supported by a clear comparison. The chart’s key pattern—that China and the United States lead by a wide margin, while most other countries are far lower—is missing, as is a clear overview. Several later statements about electricity’s importance, industries and how electricity is produced are outside the chart task. The response is also below the required 150 words; the 13 words copied from the prompt are excluded from the count. Select the main comparisons and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move through countries, using markers such as “Moreover,” “Other way,” “Third country” and “However.” However, the ideas do not form a clear, sustained progression: the response shifts from chart figures to unsupported explanations about heavy products and bills, then to general comments about electricity and the economy. Paragraphing does not separate a chart overview and supporting details, and references such as “which country” and “this” are unclear. Some linking expressions are used in ways that do not show the intended relationship between ideas. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main pattern, and a paragraph comparing selected figures; use connectors only where their logical function is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “countries” and “electricity,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “more use electricity,” “Other way,” and “heavy products.” Spelling and word-form errors—including “countrys,” “meachines,” “induastries” and “econemy”—also reduce clarity. The later vocabulary about “water, air, petrole” does not help describe the chart’s data. Build a more precise set of terms for reporting figures and comparisons, such as “generated,” “used,” “higher than” and “by contrast,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence patterns, including “As regards both country…” and “Because, our induastries…,” but control is inconsistent, and many sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. Examples include “In the China 5,322 electricity consumption,” which lacks a complete grammatical structure, and “The chart illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree. Articles and plurals are also problematic in “both country,” while punctuation and sentence boundaries are often unclear. These errors make it difficult to follow the intended comparisons. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh,” and use a small range of accurate comparison structures before attempting more complex sentences.

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