Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the top ten countries for the production and comsumtion of electricity in 2014.

It is evisent that, In the popular production electricity in the China and the limited production electricity in the Korea, Rep.

In terms of electricity in 2014, the highest kWh in the production and consumption of electricity in China of production 5,398 billion kWh and consumption 5,322. in the kWh of the US in the production of 4,099 billion kWh and 3,866 billion kWh and production 1,057 billion kWh and consumption 1,038 billion kWh in the electricity from Russia. In the japan and India the electricity production 936.2 to 871 billlion kWh and consumption 856.7 billion kWh and 698.8 billion kWh.

Regarding that remaining year, In 2014, the Canada for the production 618.9 billion kWh and 499.9 billion kWh of electricity. The France in the eletricity consumption in 462.9 billion kWh and 618.9 billion kWh produced. The Brazil, Germany and Korea, Rep of electricity production in 530.7, 526.6, 485.1 billion kWh and consumption 455.8, 582.5 and 449.5 billion kWh respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include many relevant figures, including the leading values for China and the United States and the lower production figure for Korea. However, the response gives little clear overview of the main patterns: it does not clearly state that China and the US greatly exceed the other countries, or that production is generally higher than consumption. Some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate; for example, you say France produced 618.9 billion kWh, which is Canada’s production figure (France produced 561.2). The opening overview is also difficult to interpret. To improve, summarise the dominant trends first, then select accurate comparisons and report the figures with clear labels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and broadly moves from the largest producers to the remaining countries, so there is some attempt to group information. However, progression is difficult to follow because several sentences combine multiple countries and figures without clear links. For instance, the sentence beginning “In the kWh of the US” runs into the Russia figures, while the Japan and India comparison is similarly compressed. Connectors such as “In terms of” and “Regarding” do not consistently clarify how the information relates, and “Regarding that remaining year” is especially confusing because all data refer to 2014. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by two comparison paragraphs, grouping countries by scale and using explicit transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “billion kWh,” and “respectively,” which helps communicate the chart’s subject and figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward, such as “popular production electricity,” “limited production electricity,” and “the highest kWh in the production.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “comsumtion,” “evisent,” “billlion,” and “eletricity.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison harder to understand. Aim for standard chart language and check spelling carefully; phrases such as “electricity production was highest” and “the lowest figure was recorded in” would be more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both an overview and longer sentences containing several comparisons, but grammatical control is limited and errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. Many clauses lack a clear subject or verb, as in “the highest kWh in the production and consumption of electricity in China of production 5,398…” The sentence about France also has an incomplete structure, and articles and prepositions are often used inaccurately, as in “in the China” and “in the Japan.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including “In” after a comma and sentence fragments separated by full stops. Build shorter complete sentences first, with a subject and verb for each comparison, then add accurate linking clauses.

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