Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart highlight the up ten countries ft the growth and used of electricity in 2014.In which,the rank of almost all countries same but the the more electricity produce and used in china and united states.And almost the ranking of production and consumpsion of electricity is same.

The electricity in China produce 5398 kWh and used almost same as 5322 kwh.Also in United States, the electricity built 4099 kwh and use nearly 3866 kwh.But in Russia, the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: China and the United States lead both production and consumption, and the rankings are broadly similar. The figures you provide for these two countries are accurate. However, the response reports only a small part of the chart and ends mid-sentence at “But in Russia, the”, so most countries and useful comparisons are omitted. The overview is also too general to show notable exceptions, such as Germany consuming more electricity than it produces. The response is 78 words, below the required 150, which leaves the task minimally addressed. To develop it, complete the comparison across the remaining countries and include the main exception and overall pattern.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, moving from a general statement to figures for China and the United States. Linking expressions such as “Also” and “But” show an effort to connect information. However, the progression is not sustained: the final sentence stops after introducing Russia, and there are no clear paragraphs or completed sequence of comparisons. The opening also repeats the idea that the rankings are similar without developing it. Use a short introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph comparing the figures, and ensure each sentence is complete. More precise links such as “By contrast” or “In comparison” would help show how the data relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “rank,” “produce,” “used,” and “electricity,” and the reader can identify the general topic. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts difficult to interpret. For example, “the growth and used of electricity” does not clearly describe production and consumption, while “the electricity built 4099 kWh” uses an unsuitable verb. “Consumpsion” is also misspelled, and “up ten countries” is unclear. Use the chart’s precise terms consistently—“production” and “consumption”—and choose standard reporting language such as “generated” and “consumed.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form connected sentences and include comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of structures is narrow. The opening has agreement and sentence-boundary problems: “The bar chart highlight” needs a plural verb, and “In which” is not a complete sentence in this context. The phrase “the more electricity produce and used in china” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the electricity … produce 5398 kWh and used” does not maintain a consistent verb form. Punctuation and spacing are also unreliable, as in “2014.In which”. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and parallel verbs, for example, “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh.”

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