Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates about the top producers and consumers of electricity in 2014.

Overall the China sat at the top both in making and consuming followed by United States while Korea,Rep is at the bottom of list.

China and United states are highest electricity producers and consumers in 2019. China dramatically produced 5398billion and USA 4099Kwh and China consumed 5322billion KWh and US 3866billion KWh. Russia is far behind and made only 1057billion KWh and consumed 1038billion KWh chased closely by Japan with production of 1057billion KWh and consumption of 1038billion KWh followed by India who produced 871billion KWh and consumed 698.9billion KWh in 2014.

Moreover, In 2014 Canada produced 618.9billion KWh and consumed around 499.9billion KWh. By comparing France,Brazil and Germany produced almost same around 540billion KWh and in consumption France and Brazil consumed around 460billion KWh while astonishingly Germany consumed 582billion KWh more than its production. In addition Korea is behind all in production and consumption it produced around 485.1 billion KWh and consumed 449.5billion KWh in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China leads both production and consumption, the United States is second, and Korea is at the bottom. You also include useful comparisons, especially Germany’s consumption exceeding its production and the similar figures for France and Brazil. However, some details are inaccurate: the year is given as 2019 in one sentence, and Japan’s figures are incorrectly repeated as Russia’s rather than reported as 936.2 and 856.7. The opening overview could also summarise the broad gap between the top two countries and the remaining nations more clearly. Overall, the key features are covered, but some comparisons are less fully or accurately presented than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an overview to groups of country comparisons, and paragraphing helps separate the main points. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “In addition” show an effort to guide the reader. However, progression within the main paragraph is sometimes difficult to follow: the Russia–Japan comparison repeats Russia’s figures for Japan, and the long sentence beginning “Russia is far behind” combines several countries and details without clear boundaries. Some transitions, including “By comparing,” are awkward, while repeated use of “followed by” makes the sequence feel mechanical. Grouping countries more deliberately and using shorter comparison sentences would make the relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “producers,” “consumers,” “produced,” “consumed,” and “by comparing,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. There are also attempts at more expressive wording, such as “dramatically” and “astonishingly.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for a formal chart summary: “sat at the top,” “chased closely,” and “behind all” are less suitable than neutral reporting language. “Dramatically produced” does not clearly describe the size of the figure, and “making” is less precise than “production.” More consistent use of accurate terms for ranking, amounts, and differences would improve precision while retaining your current range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, and the main meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical control is uneven. The overview has errors in “the China sat at the top” and “Korea,Rep is at the bottom,” while “China and United states are highest” lacks an article and has inconsistent capitalisation. Several sentences run together, particularly the long comparison beginning “Russia is far behind,” and punctuation around introductory phrases and country names is inconsistent. Tense also shifts between past reporting and present forms, as in “is at the bottom” alongside “produced.” Practise accurate articles, agreement, consistent past tense, and sentence boundaries; these would make your varied sentence attempts easier to follow.

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