Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar graph depicts the information regarding the top ten countries in terms of electricity production and consumption in 2014,with figure measured in billion kwh.

Overall, it is crystal clear that, china and the united states took the lead rather than other countries use in electrocity,however last two givencountries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The opening identifies the chart’s subject and year, and the overview begins to highlight China and the United States as leading countries. However, the response stops mid-sentence at “last two given countries,” so it does not complete the overview or report the main comparisons and figures. It also does not clarify whether the leaders are highest in production, consumption, or both. The task requires a summary of the chart, but this response contains only a brief introduction and an unfinished overview, with no supporting data. It is also 101 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the overview and compare key figures—for example, the two leading countries with the remaining nations, and Germany’s higher consumption than production.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview signalled by “Overall.” This gives the reader a recognisable starting structure. However, the second sentence is unfinished, ending with “last two given countries,” and the ideas therefore do not progress to a complete summary. The transition “however” does not lead into a finished contrast, and there are no body paragraphs or further details to connect. Develop a clear sequence: introduce the chart, state the main overview, then group and compare the figures in one or two paragraphs. Complete each sentence and use linking words only when the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “top ten countries,” “electricity production and consumption,” and “figure measured in billion kwh.” These choices make the topic identifiable, but the range is very limited because the response ends before describing any data or comparisons. Several word choices and spellings are inaccurate: “electrocity” should be “electricity,” and “countries use in electrocity” is not a natural way to express the comparison. “Took the lead” is understandable but less precise than saying the countries “ranked highest” in production and consumption. Use accurate terms such as “generated,” “consumed,” and “respectively,” and check spelling and standard capitalisation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The opening sentence is a complete attempt to introduce the chart, and “Overall, it is crystal clear that…” shows an effort to form a more complex sentence. However, the response provides too little language to demonstrate a range of structures, and the overview sentence is incomplete: “however last two given countries” has no finished clause. The opening also has a punctuation problem where there is no space after the comma before “with.” In the overview, the construction “China and the United States took the lead rather than other countries use…” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. Practise completing clauses and using a direct structure, such as “China and the United States produced and consumed the most electricity.”

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