Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart compares the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 now i will summarise this bar chart.

Bar chart is showing the production and consumption, of electricity in China united States Russia Japan India Canada France Brazil Germany Korea Rap i will explain these contries production and consumption of electricity.

First of all, China is given on nuber one in china in 2014 electricity happened produce 5,398(billionkWh) and happened consum 5,322(kWh), second United States is given on number 2 in 2014 in United States elecricity happened produce 4,099(billionkWh) and happened consum 3,866(billionkWh), Russia is given on number 3 in 2014 in Russia enectricity happened 1,057(billionkWh) and happened consum 1,038(billionkWh) Japan is given on number 4 in Japan in 2014 electricity happened produce 936,2(billionkWh) and happened consum 856,7(billionkWh) India is given on number 5 in India in 2014 electricity happened produce 871(billionkWh) and happened consum 698,8(billionkWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several figures accurately for China, the United States, Russia, Japan and India. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main pattern, such as China and the United States being far ahead of the other countries, and it stops before covering the remaining five countries or making meaningful comparisons. The final sentence is also incomplete. The response contains 139 words, so it does not meet the 150-word minimum; 13 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count. To improve, add an overview, select key comparisons across the full chart, and ensure the report is complete and long enough to address the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: an introduction is followed by a list of countries and then figures for the first five. The phrases “First of all” and “second” attempt to guide the reader through the data. However, the opening repeats the same information, and the long paragraph strings several country descriptions together without clear sentence boundaries. The repeated formula “is given on number” also makes the progression mechanical, while the response ends abruptly during the India figures. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and grouped comparisons, and connect related figures more efficiently so the reader can follow the main patterns rather than a repetitive list.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” and “billion kWh,” and the country names and figures are generally identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several repeated or inaccurate expressions make the report sound unnatural: “electricity happened produce,” “happened consum,” and “is given on number.” There are also spelling errors such as “contries,” “elecricity,” and “enectricity,” and inconsistent rendering of units. These issues reduce precision, even though the intended meaning is often recoverable. Build a small set of accurate chart-reporting phrases and check spelling and unit notation before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report several data points in connected sentences, but the structures are mostly repetitive and basic, with limited control of sentence boundaries. For example, “China is given on nuber one in china in 2014 electricity happened produce…” contains faulty verb patterns and unclear clause structure; similar errors recur in the descriptions of the United States and Russia. The Japan sentence runs into the next country without clear punctuation, and the final parenthesis in the India figure is left unclosed. These problems make parts of the report difficult to read. Practise concise comparative sentences with accurate subject–verb patterns, and use full stops and commas to separate each comparison.

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