Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart represents the information about the top ten countries for the manufacturing and the usage of electricity in 2014.

Overall,There were total ten countries .China produced more electricity then compare to other 9 countries .Also, china used the highest amount of electricity while , Brazil was the only country who used more electricity then they produced.

China produced the highest amount of electricity of 5,398 kWh .The second highest amount of electricity was produced by united states .The countries in the middle like, Russia , Japan, India and Canada was approximately same on the production and usage of electricity.Korea produced the lowest amount of electricity and also while Brazil was the only country who used electricity more then they produced .The lowest consumption of electricity was by korea of 449.5 kWh .The second lowest production and consumption of electricity is by Germany

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a basic overview: China leads both production and consumption, while Germany is the only country whose consumption exceeds production. However, the comparison is misreported: this applies to Germany, not Brazil. The claim that the middle countries were “approximately same” is too broad, since their figures vary, and the final statement about Germany being second-lowest in both measures is inaccurate. Include a few accurate comparisons, such as the large gap between China and the United States and the generally lower consumption figures. The response also falls seven words short of the required minimum, and several key features remain underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall-to-detail structure, beginning with an overview and then moving to country figures. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the overview and details are crowded together, and the sequence of comparisons is not consistently clear: the discussion moves from China to the middle countries, then Korea, Brazil and Germany without a clear grouping. Repeated points about Brazil and the lowest figures also interrupt progression. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and group countries by notable patterns or rank. More accurate linking and reference would make the relationships between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a basic range of relevant terms, including “produced,” “used,” “highest amount,” and “lowest consumption,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, and some choices are imprecise or unsuitable for describing a chart. “Manufacturing” and “usage” are less natural here than “production” and “consumption,” while “middle” does not clearly identify the countries’ relative figures. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “then” for “than” and inconsistent capitalisation of “China,” “United States,” and “Korea.” Use precise comparison language and check spelling and country names carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences communicate a basic comparison, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some passages awkward. For example, “There were total ten countries” lacks an article and has an unnatural structure, while “The countries in the middle … was approximately same” has agreement and article errors. The sentence beginning “Also, china used…” contains confusing punctuation and an unclear clause about Brazil. There are also inconsistent sentence boundaries and spacing, including “Overall,There” and “electricity .The.” Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine related information using controlled complex structures.

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