Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar illustrates the top ten countries for the consumption and production of electricity in 2014

Overal china lead the figure, while united states experience similar result as comparred to first figure. Furthermore india,russia, japan,was approximately same psition. Canada, france, brazil and germany experieced approximately same result, while korea, rep are in the last figure.

The production and consumption of electricity in china was 5,398 b or 5,322 in a year whears, united states the amount of production are 4,099 and consumption are 3,866 in 2014. Moreover, russia was 1057 of production and 1,038 of consumption of electricity. The production of electricity in japan and india was 936.2 and 871 and consumption of both was 698.9 bilion and 498.8 billion in 2014

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s broad subject and give a useful overview that China leads while the United States is second, and you report several figures for the largest producers. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it stops before covering much of the chart, and the overview is vague, especially the claim that India, Russia and Japan were in “approximately same position.” Some figures are inaccurate: India’s consumption is given as 698.9 rather than 698.8, and Japan’s consumption is reported as 498.8 rather than 856.7. The chart also shows Germany consuming more than it produces, a notable exception that is missed. The response is 28 words below the required minimum. To improve, include a clear overview and compare the main patterns across all ten countries, checking figures carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening overview is followed by a paragraph giving figures, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” signal additions. However, the progression is not consistently clear. The overview groups countries as having the “same result” or “same position” without explaining whether this refers to production, consumption, or ranking. The final sentence also combines Japan and India’s figures in a way that makes it difficult to match each consumption value to its country. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are limited, with the opening lacking a full stop. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and group figures by country or by production-versus-consumption pattern so the reader can follow them easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “approximately,” and “amount,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. “Lead the figure” is not a natural way to describe the highest values, while “same result” and “last figure” do not precisely express ranking or comparison. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Overal,” “comparred,” “experieced,” and “bilion.” Aim for precise terms such as “recorded the highest output,” “ranked second,” and “consumed less than it produced.” Check spelling and use country names and chart terminology consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas with clauses and use some past-tense reporting, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to interpret. For example, “united states experience similar result” has problems with tense, agreement, and article use; “the amount of production are” also has subject–verb disagreement. The sentence beginning “The production and consumption of electricity in china was…” does not clearly connect the two figures to their categories, and “the production of electricity in japan and india was…” uses an awkward singular verb with two countries. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate past-tense reporting, plural agreement, and shorter sentences that clearly identify each country and its figures.

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