Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries(china, united states, russia, japan, india, canada, france, brazil, germany and korea, rep.)for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall it is clear that, china is the first highest number of electricity production and consumption and followed by united states. Russia and japan almost similar to both sides, while india lowest number of billion kwh. Korea, rep is very least number of billion production. In contrast, canada, france, brazil, germany are countries almost similar to both production and it is lowest number of billion kwh.

Looking at the details, China is the highest production 5,398, consumption 5322 and followed by united states both sides 4099 and 3866. While,russia and japan almost similar to the production and consumption, russia 1057 and 1038, japan 936.2 and 856.7. India is lowest number of billion kwh 871 and 698.8.the very least production and consumption in korea, rep at 485.1 and 449.5.Turning to the final piont, in contrast production and consumtion countries are canada 618.9 and 499.9,France 561.2 and 462.9,brazil 530.7 and 455.8, germany 526.6 and 449.5.

In summary ,more electrity and production, consumption countries china and united states and very least number of billion kwh is korea, rep. Others lowest amount of both side elctricity in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several key figures accurately, including China’s production and consumption and the values for the United States, Russia and Japan. The overview also recognises that China and the United States lead. However, some important comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: India is not the lowest overall, since Korea has the lowest figures, and Germany’s consumption is 582.5, not 449.5. The claim that Canada, France, Brazil and Germany are “almost similar” also overlooks Germany’s higher consumption. The response therefore covers the task only partially, with some features under-developed. Make the overview more precise, distinguish production from consumption, and select comparisons that reflect the data accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph of figures and a concluding summary. This gives the reader an overall route through the information, and phrases such as “Looking at the details” and “Turning to the final point” signal transitions. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the conclusion repeats that China and the United States are highest and Korea is lowest, while the overview and detail paragraph also revisit these points. Some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly “In contrast” before a list of countries whose figures are being reported, and “both sides” does not clearly identify production and consumption. Group the countries more logically and use comparisons to connect the figures rather than repeating them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “highest” and “followed by,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “first highest number,” “very least number of billion production” and “lowest amount of both side electricity.” Repetition of “almost similar” also limits precision, and spelling errors such as “consumtion,” “electrity” and “elctricity” are noticeable. These choices sometimes make the comparisons difficult to interpret. Aim for concise, standard expressions such as “ranked first,” “the lowest figures” and “their production and consumption levels were similar,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message can usually be followed. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “China is the first highest number of electricity production and consumption” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “India is lowest number of billion kwh” is missing an article and a suitable complement. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “698.8.the very least production,” and several clauses are joined awkwardly. Practise forming complete comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh.” Use consistent capitalisation and punctuation as well.

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