Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, it is noticeable that teh highest production and consumption of electricity in 2014 is in china which is 5,398 and 5,322. The lowest production as well as consumption of eclectricity is in korea which is 485.1 and 449.5.

It is evident that the production and consumption of electricity in china 5398 and 5322, united states 4099 and 3866, russia 1057 and 1038, japan 9362 and 856.7, india 871 and 693.8, canada 618.9 and 499.9, france 561.2 and 462.9, brazil, 530.7 and 455.8, germany 526.6 and 582.5 and in korea 485.1 and 449.5 respectively.

A closer look reveals that there is large difference between productiona nd consumption of electricity of china and korea like the consumptiona as well as production in china is more than 5 thousands while in korea ratio of both things is just showing few points.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview by noting that China has the highest figures and Korea the lowest. However, the response only partially reports the main features: most of the body is a list of country figures, with little comparison or selection of notable patterns. There is also a data error: Japan’s production is 936.2, not “9362,” and India’s consumption is 698.8, not “693.8.” The final comparison focuses only on China and Korea and describes their difference vaguely. The response is 143 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 13 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop the overview and compare key contrasts, such as the large gap between the top two countries and the generally lower consumption figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, a body paragraph and a concluding comparison. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Overall” and “A closer look reveals” signal the purpose of sections. However, there is no clear progression from the overview to selected comparisons: the long sentence listing all ten countries and figures is difficult to follow, and the final paragraph repeats the China–Korea contrast without adding much analysis. “Respectively” does not make the sequence of figures especially easy to track. Group the countries by meaningful patterns, use separate sentences for the leading countries and the remaining group, and connect comparisons explicitly rather than presenting a catalogue.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart topic and make basic comparisons, using terms such as “production,” “consumption,” “highest,” and “lowest.” However, the range is limited and several choices or spelling errors reduce precision, including “teh,” “eclectricity,” and “productiona nd.” The phrase “ratio of both things” is not appropriate for describing the electricity figures, while “just showing few points” is vague and does not clearly convey the scale. Repeated use of “electricity” and “production and consumption” also makes the response sound repetitive. Use more precise chart language, such as “output,” “usage,” “figure,” and “the gap between production and consumption,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including the overview beginning “Overall” and the final sentence beginning “A closer look reveals.” However, the range is limited, and the long list in the third paragraph is not formed as a complete, controlled sentence: it lacks a clear verb and relies on “respectively” to connect many figures. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, for example, “the highest production and consumption … is” should use a plural verb, and “the production and consumption … in China 5398 and 5322” is incomplete. The final sentence has an unclear structure around “like.” Build shorter comparison sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and punctuation.

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