Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart given illustrates the comparison between production and consumption of electricity in ten countries in 2014. unit is measured in billion kWh.

Overall, China was the largest producer and consumer of electricity among all countries. The United States stood second, while Korea. Rep. being the last ranked country in this list. Almost all countries produced more electricity than usage with the exception of Germany in 2014.

Electricity production of China in 2014 was 5,398 Billion kWh making it first ranked country for elctricity production. While electricity consumption was 5,322 billion kWh. The data recorded showed the value for electricity production and use were 4,099 and 3,866 for The USA in billion kWh, followed by Russia (1,057 & 1,038 billion kWh), Japan (936.2 & 856.7 billion kWh), India (871 & 698.8 billion kWh),Canada (618.9 & 499.9 billion kwh),France (530 & 462.9 Billion kW h) Brazil (530.7& 455.8 billion kWh), Germany( 526.6 &582.5 billion kwh) and Korea. Rep.(485.1 & 449.5 billion kWh).

The recorded data showed a small deficit in electricity production and consumtion for Germany.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China leads both measures, the United States is second, and production exceeds consumption in nearly every country, with Germany as the exception. You also include figures for all ten countries, which gives the report relevant detail. However, some data are inaccurate: France’s production is 561.2, not 530, and the overview’s description of Korea as last-ranked is ambiguous because Germany ranks ninth for production but has the lowest consumption only among neither measure. The final sentence repeats Germany’s deficit without adding much analysis. To strengthen the response, select the most important comparisons and explain the large gap between the two leading countries and the much lower figures for the remaining nations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph reporting figures. This makes the main message accessible, and phrases such as “Overall” and “followed by” help signal relationships. However, the long data sentence beginning “The data recorded showed” lists nearly every country in sequence, so comparisons are difficult to follow. The final sentence repeats the point about Germany rather than developing a new comparison. Some linking is also mechanical, and punctuation around country names and figures is inconsistent. Grouping the leading countries separately from the lower-producing countries, and using shorter sentences to compare them, would create clearer progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “largest producer,” “ranked,” and “deficit.” These terms generally communicate the chart’s subject clearly. There are, however, some inaccurate or awkward choices: “electricity production and use” is less precise than consistently using “production and consumption,” while “last ranked country” is not a natural way to describe Korea’s position. Spelling and formatting slips such as “elctricity,” “consumtion,” and inconsistent forms of “billion kWh” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, consistent chart language and check spelling and units carefully; this will make the report sound more controlled without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overview communicates the main trends. Some grammatical errors remain, although the meaning is generally clear. For example, “unit is measured in billion kWh” is missing an article and has an awkward passive construction; “Korea. Rep. being the last ranked country” is an incomplete clause; and “While electricity consumption was 5,322” is a fragment when separated from the preceding sentence. The long sentence listing the figures also needs clearer sentence boundaries and punctuation. Use complete sentences, check articles and clause structure, and vary the reporting sentences while keeping each comparison grammatically self-contained.

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