Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Visual identify consumption and production of electricity in top ten countries in 2014.

Most top ten countries consume more electricity and produce energy because their population is icreased day by day. As we see, China produce electricity 5398 billion KWH which is very large number and consume 5322 billion KWH. China produce more electricty day by day as their population increased and consume more energy. United States produce 4099 billion KWH which is also very big number and their consumption was 3866 billion KWH, however mostly conturies not produce as such large number of electricity instead of China ana United States.

Russia is very big and their production of electricity in 2014 was 1057 billion KWH and they consume 1038 billion KWH which is also excessive. However Japan and India likely the same as their production is not more then 1000 billion KWH. Japan's production of electricity was 936.2 billion KWH and consuming 856.7 billion KWH, Moreover Indian production of electricity was 871 billion KWH and consuming 698.8 billion KWH.

France, Brazil and Germany was likely the same as such their production and consumption is not more than 600 billion KWH. In canada electricity production was 618.9 billion KWH and consumption only 499.9 billion KWH. Korea produced just 485.1 billion KWH energy and consume 449.5 billion KWH, Instead of this China and United States production and consumption of electricity was very large in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report several key figures accurately, including China’s production and consumption, the United States’ figures, and values for Russia, Japan, India, Canada and Korea. You also identify the broad contrast between the two leading countries and the rest. However, the response does not give a clear, data-based overview of the main pattern: production is generally higher than consumption, while Germany is the exception, consuming more than it produces. The claim that most countries consume more than they produce is therefore inaccurate, and the explanation about population increasing is not shown by the chart. Some comparisons, such as grouping France, Brazil and Germany as similar, also overlook Germany’s distinct figures. Focus on the chart’s comparisons and avoid unsupported causes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is divided into paragraphs and generally moves from the largest producers to countries with lower figures, so the reader can follow its broad direction. However, there is no distinct overview to establish the main features before the detailed figures, and the progression is weakened by repeated conclusions about China and the United States. Linking words such as “However,” “Moreover” and “Instead of this” are sometimes used inaccurately or do not show a clear relationship between ideas. For example, the final “Instead of this” does not logically connect Korea’s figures to the comparison that follows. Organise the report around an overview and clear comparison groups, and use transitions only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “electricity” and “billion KWH,” and the main subject remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “very big number,” “excessive” and “likely the same.” Some word choices make comparisons unclear: “consume more electricity and produce energy” does not accurately express the chart’s pattern, while “Instead of this” is not an appropriate contrast phrase here. Spelling errors, including “icreased,” “electricty” and “conturies,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of comparison terms and check spelling, especially for repeated task vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences using clauses and contrast, for example, “China produce electricity … and consume …” and “however mostly conturies not produce…”. However, these attempts are often faulty, and simple sentence patterns dominate. Errors in subject–verb agreement and verb forms occur repeatedly: “China produce,” “their population increased,” and “Germany was likely the same.” There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, as in “France, Brazil and Germany was likely the same as such their production…” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly after linking words. Practise accurate present-tense reporting structures and use shorter, controlled comparisons before adding more complex clauses.

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