Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart depicts the information about the electricity production and consumption in top 10 countries in 2014.

Overall, it is evident that China and United States recorded the highest figure in consumption as well as electricity production. Whereas, Brazil and Korea Republic has lowest figure in terms of electricity consumption.

To begin with, in 2014 China had highest contribution not only in consumption but also in production of electricity which is 5398 and 5322 billion kWh respectively. Additionally, Unites States recorded the second highest figure in both utilization and production of electricity in the same year. Whereas, Russia secure third position in the chart of top 10 countries over Japan Which had 936.2 and 856.7 billion kWh electricity production and consumption rate respectively.

Moreover, Brazil and Germany had almost equal number of consumption and production rate in the year 2014. While, Korea Republic recorded lowest rate as compared to rest of the 9 countries which is 485.1 and 449.5 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that China and the United States lead both production and consumption, and you include several relevant figures, such as China’s 5,398 and 5,322 billion kWh. However, the overview is incomplete: Brazil is not among the lowest consumers, and Germany’s consumption (582.5) is higher than its production (526.6), so the claim that Brazil and Germany are almost equal in both measures is misleading. The comparison of Russia and Japan is also unclear because the figures given are Japan’s, not Russia’s. To make the report more complete, compare the middle-ranking countries accurately and note the notable exception of Germany consuming more than it produces.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. The sequence from the leading countries to lower-ranking countries is generally understandable, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Moreover” help signal stages in the report. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. The repeated use of “Whereas” creates sentence fragments or awkward links, and “Russia secure third position … over Japan Which had…” makes it difficult to tell which country the figures describe. Grouping countries more clearly—for example, leaders, middle producers, and the lower group—and using direct comparisons would improve progression and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “recorded,” and “highest figure,” so the chart’s subject is clear. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “contribution” and “utilization,” but these are not always natural for describing electricity data; “output” and “consumption” would be more precise. Some word-choice and spelling errors reduce accuracy, including “Unites States,” “secure third position,” and “lowest rate.” “Almost equal number of consumption and production rate” is also an awkward collocation. Aim for concise, conventional chart language and use “figures” or “levels” consistently when comparing quantities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “Whereas” and “which,” and the main meaning is usually recoverable. However, some errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction remain. For example, “Brazil and Korea Republic has” should use a plural verb, while “China had highest contribution” needs an article before “highest.” The sentence beginning “Whereas, Russia secure…” has an incomplete or awkward structure, and “Japan Which had…” uses incorrect capitalization and unclear clause attachment. Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each contrast clause is connected to a complete main clause. More consistently controlled complex sentences would strengthen accuracy.

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