Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph chart below indicats about the top ten countries for the manufactor and the usage of electricity in 2014 .

From the given data the ranking of top 10 countries their production( billion kWh)and consumption of electricity are given below .

In 2014 consumption and production of electricity in China is more than other country than the most of the others . After that we have united states which have placed secound in the chart which have low cousumption and high production of electricity. Then we have Russia , Japan , India , which are in mid having low consumption and high production . After that Canada ,France , Brazil have high production but lower consumption . Then we have Germany which have high consumption than production .At last we have Korea , Rep which have high production than consumption .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report the broad pattern that China leads, followed by the United States, with Germany as the exception where consumption exceeds production. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: it gives no actual figures and offers a limited overview of the differences between the two measures. Some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear—for example, Canada, France and Brazil are described as having “high production,” although their values are relatively low compared with the leading countries. The opening also calls production “manufactor,” which does not accurately describe the chart. The response is 142 words, below the required 150. To improve, add a clear overview and support key comparisons with accurate figures, including the large gap between the top two countries and Germany’s unusual result.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from China and the United States through the middle-ranked countries to Korea, and phrases such as “After that” and “At last” help signal this order. However, the information is presented in only two short introductory paragraphs followed by one long paragraph, so the main comparisons are not clearly grouped or developed. Repeated sequencing phrases make the progression mechanical, and the reader has to infer how the country groups relate to the chart’s ranking. The second paragraph largely repeats that the data are given below rather than advancing the summary. Organise the response into a brief introduction, an overview of the main patterns, and a body comparing the leading countries with the lower-ranked group; use linking expressions to show contrast as well as order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranking,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and form errors reduce precision: “manufactor” is not an appropriate term for production, “usage” is less suitable than “consumption” in this context, and “cousumption,” “secound,” and “indicat” are misspelled. Phrases such as “high production” are also too broad for countries whose figures are comparatively modest. Aim for accurate chart language and more precise comparisons, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “slightly higher,” and “substantially lower.” Proofreading spelling and choosing terms that match the data will make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including “After that we have united states which have placed secound in the chart which have low cousumption and high production of electricity.” However, the repeated use of “which” clauses makes the structure difficult to follow, and subject–verb agreement is often inaccurate: “consumption and production … is” should take a plural verb, while “United States … have” should be “has” or be recast. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “Then we have Germany which have high consumption than production .At last…”. Most sentences rely on the same basic pattern, with limited control of more varied structures. Use shorter, complete comparisons, check agreement and punctuation, and practise combining ideas with accurate contrast clauses.

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