Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart depicts the consumption and production of top ten countries in terms of electricity in the year 2014.The top two countries producing and consuming most of the electricity among these are China and the United states with China taking the lead by producing 5398 billion kWh electricty in year 2014 and also in the consumption of 5322 billion kWh of electricity. It concludes that consumption and production of electricty in China is almost the same. The second country on the bar chart is the United states producing 4099 billion kWh of electricity in year 2014 with consuming 3866 billion kWh electricity in return showing that the production is a little higher than consumption.Then comes Russia which has produced 1057 billion kWh and consumed 1038 billion kWh of electricity showing an almost an equal amount in terms of production and consumption of electricity. The other countries in the list producing and consuming most of the electricity in the year 2014 are Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea, Rep. with korea being on the tenth position producing and consuming the least amout of electricity in the year 2014. It has produced 485.1 billion kWh and consumed 449.5 billion kWh. Therefore this bar chart concludes that China being the first in the consumption and production of most of the electricity while korea being the last by producing and consuming least amount of electricit in the year 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several accurate figures, especially for China, the United States, Russia and Korea. You also note the broad pattern that China leads and Korea is last, which gives the response a relevant overview. However, the account focuses heavily on the top three and the final country, while the other figures are merely listed; important comparisons among the middle-ranked countries are not developed. The statement that Korea consumes the least is inaccurate: Germany’s consumption is 582.5 billion kWh, higher than several countries below it, while Korea is indeed the lowest producer. Include a clearer overview of the overall pattern and highlight notable exceptions such as Germany consuming more than it produces.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a generally understandable order, moving from China and the United States to Russia and then the remaining countries. Linking expressions such as “Then comes” and “Therefore” help signal progression. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, and several ideas are joined into extended sentences, making comparisons harder to follow. The repeated conclusion about China leading and Korea being last also adds little new information. Group the data into paragraphs—for example, an overview followed by comparisons of the leading and remaining countries—and use clearer transitions to distinguish the main pattern from exceptions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “producing,” and “consuming,” and the repeated use of “billion kWh” makes the subject clear. However, the range is limited, with “electricity” and “producing and consuming” repeated frequently. Some phrasing is awkward, such as “with consuming 3866 … in return” and “the other countries … producing and consuming most,” which reduces precision. There are also spelling errors, including “electricty,” “amout,” and “electricit,” and inconsistent capitalization of “Korea.” Use a wider range of accurate comparison language and check spelling and country-name capitalization.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “showing that” and “with Korea being…,” and the main meaning is generally clear. Some sentences are grammatically controlled, such as the comparison that China’s production and consumption are almost the same. However, long sentences joined with limited punctuation create occasional grammatical awkwardness. For example, “The second country … producing … with consuming …” lacks a well-formed parallel structure, and “showing an almost an equal amount” contains an unnecessary article. There are also missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent sentence boundaries. Break up the longest sentences and check articles, parallel phrasing, and punctuation to improve accuracy.

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