Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

From an overall perspective, China is the country with the most production and also consumption of electricity among the top ten countries. While, korea is the least in both terms.

To begin with, China is the country who's production of electricity is 5,398 billion kWh the most production among 10 countries and also in terms of consumption with 5,322 billion kWh and rank no.1. United states ranks 2nd position in both categories 4,099 in production and 3,866 in consumption. While, Russia and Japan hold almost same number in production and with figured 1057 and 1038 respectively but in consumtion Japan consume less than Russia with 856.7 and 1,038 respectively.

Furthermore, India ranks 5th with 871 billion kWh in production. On the other hand Canada's production is 618.9 and consumption is 499.9. While, France , Brazil and Germany produce almost same electricity and as well as consumption Korea ranks on 10 spot with less production and as well as less consumption with 485.1 and 449.5 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main extremes accurately: China leads both production and consumption, while Korea is lowest, and you include several relevant figures for China, the United States, Russia, Japan, India and Canada. However, coverage of the chart is partial and some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, you say Russia and Japan have “almost same number in production,” although their production figures differ substantially (1,057 versus 936.2). The sentence then mixes Japan’s consumption with Russia’s figure, making the comparison difficult to follow. Germany is also an important exception: its consumption (582.5) exceeds its production (526.6), but this is not reported. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons across the remaining countries would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the information generally moves from the leading countries towards the lower-ranked ones. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven, and several linking expressions are used mechanically or incorrectly. For instance, “While” begins standalone sentences more than once, and “Furthermore” does not clearly signal the shift from Russia and Japan to India and Canada. The Russia–Japan comparison also combines figures in a way that obscures which country each number belongs to. Grouping countries more consistently and using clear comparison sentences, with explicit references such as “by contrast” or “whereas,” would improve the flow and make relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranks,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward or unclear. For example, “with figured 1057 and 1038 respectively” does not express the comparison naturally, and “Japan consume less” is not an appropriate form for describing the data. “In both terms” and “on 10 spot” are also imprecise. There are spelling errors such as “korea,” “consumtion,” and “United states.” Aim for precise reporting phrases such as “recorded,” “stood at,” and “ranked,” and check country names and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “on the other hand,” but control is inconsistent. Several sentences are incomplete or have faulty clause structure: “While, korea is the least in both terms” is a fragment, and “While, Russia and Japan hold…” is also not properly joined to a main clause. There are errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “Japan consume,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and possessive forms in “China is the country who's production.” Punctuation around introductory linkers is also unreliable. These errors sometimes make comparisons difficult to interpret. Practise complete sentence patterns and check each sentence for a clear subject, verb and correctly connected clauses.

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