Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consomuption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, it is clear that China was the number one in the production and consumption followed by United states, while Korea. Rep was the latest in this bar chart. As a result, China was more likely to produce and consump electricity in 2014.

As the bar chart shows, China came in first place for the production of electricy to around 5,398 billion kWh. Then, it followed by United states to around 4,099 billion kWh. Moreover, Russia came in third place around 1,057 billion kWh. In addition, Japon came in fourth place to approximately 936,2 billion kWh. Finally, Korea. Rep came in last place with 589,1billion kWh. As a result, China was the most popular country for the production and consumption of electricity.

in the other hand, China came in first place for the consumption of electricity in 2014 to around 5,322 billion kWh , it followed by United states to around 3,866 billion kWh. in addition, Korea. Rep came in last place for consumption of electricity to around 449,5 billion kWh. Therefore, it is clear that China was the most popular country for production and consumption of electricity, while Korea, Rep was the lowest country in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview: China leads both measures, while Korea is among the lowest. You also report several accurate production figures for China, the United States, Russia and Japan, and the consumption figures for the two leaders. However, the response only partially selects and reports the main features. The production figure for Korea is incorrect (485.1, not 589.1), and calling it the lowest in both categories overlooks Germany’s higher consumption than production and Korea’s position relative to other countries. Most middle-ranking consumption data and useful comparisons are omitted. Develop the overview by comparing the large gap between the top two countries and the much lower figures for the rest, and report the notable Germany exception.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for production and consumption. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited: the production paragraph lists several countries in rank order, then repeats the claim that China is the most popular, while the consumption paragraph gives only the top two and the last-ranked country. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “In addition” and “As a result” are repetitive or do not show a clear logical relationship. The opening “in the other hand” also does not connect the sections accurately. Organise the details around meaningful comparisons, and use fewer, more precise transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “approximately,” “first place” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning less clear. For example, “the latest” is not appropriate for the lowest-ranked country, “most popular country” does not describe electricity output, and “consump electricity” is an incorrect word form. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “consomuption,” “electricy” and “Japon.” Use precise reporting language such as “generated,” “used,” “ranked last” and “accounted for,” and check country names and key terms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce several understandable simple sentences and attempt longer structures with “while,” “followed by” and “as the bar chart shows.” However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, articles, prepositions and punctuation. For example, “China was the number one in the production” has an unnecessary article and an awkward construction; “Then, it followed by United states” is missing the passive verb form; and “came in third place around 1,057” needs a preposition such as “with.” Capitalisation and comma spacing are also inconsistent, particularly at the start of the final paragraph. Practise accurate comparative and passive structures, and proofread each sentence for complete verb phrases and punctuation.

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