Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The horizontal bar illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in the final ten nations at year 2014. The data is collected in billion kwh.

In an overview, it is crystal clear that china was the biggest producer as well as consumer of light to that of other nations.

Looking from the production of electricity, the lowest production of light was done by Korea which was 451.1 billion kwh less than the production done by japan, it was 936.2. Moreover, a similarity could be seen among France and Brazil which was approximately from 561.2 to 530.7 orderly. Additionally the United States and China was depicted as 4.099 and 5.398 respectively.

However, In the case of comsumption, Brazil and Korea were almost same with the minimum ratio of 449.5. While, the Russia was 1.038 which was almost double from canada as well as germany also. Furthermore, the China was accounted as the highest consumer in comparison with rest of all countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview by noting that China leads both production and consumption. You also select several comparisons, including the high figures for China and the United States and the lower production levels of Korea, France and Brazil. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: Korea’s production is reported as 451.1, although the chart gives 485.1, and the statement that Russia’s consumption is almost double Canada’s and Germany’s is not supported by the figures. Germany is also an important exception, consuming more electricity than it produces, but this is not explained. More accurate comparisons and a clearer account of the main patterns would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for production and consumption. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and transitions such as “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “However” signal relationships between points. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because comparisons are presented without a clear organising principle. For example, the production paragraph moves from Korea and Japan to France and Brazil, then to the United States and China. Some linking is also mechanical, and “While” begins a fragment-like sentence rather than a complete contrast. Grouping countries by high, middle and low figures, and linking each comparison explicitly, would improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “overview,” and “highest,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “production of light,” “minimum ratio,” and “the final ten nations.” “Similarity could be seen” is also vague for describing figures that are close. Spelling and number presentation need attention: “comsumption” is misspelled, while “4.099” and “5.398” could be mistaken for decimals rather than thousands. Use precise chart language such as “electricity output,” “lowest figure,” and “approximately equal,” and write large values consistently with commas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “which was 936.2” and the contrast introduced by “However.” The main message is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “the lowest production of light was done by Korea which was 451.1 billion kwh less than the production done by japan” has an unclear relative clause and comparison structure. There are also agreement and article problems in “the United States and China was depicted” and “the China was accounted,” as well as an incomplete construction beginning “While, the Russia was 1.038.” Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and punctuation when joining comparisons.

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