Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the top ten for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, the China has the highest figure for the production and consumption of electricity as compared with other countries, while United States has second proportion.In addition,Korea Rep recorded the lowest.

Initially, the China production of electricity was 5,398 KWh billion, while consumption of record was 5,322KWh billion.Furtheremore,the United States production of electricity and consumption was 4,099 KWh billion and 3,866KWh billion. The Russian and Japan production of electricity was 1,057KWh billion and 936.2 KWh billion. The consumption of electricity was 1,038 KWh billion and 856.7 billion.

Secondly,the India, Canada,and France production of electricity was 871 KWh billion, 618.9 KWh billion and 561.2 KWh billion, while, consumption of electricity was 698.8 KWh billion, 499.9KWh billion and 462.9 KWh billion. Ultimately,the Brazil, Germany and Korea,Rep production of electricity was 530.7 KWh billion, 526.6KWh billion, and 485.1KWh billion,whereas,the consumption of electricity was 455.8KWh billion ,582.5 KWh billion, and 449.5 KWh billion respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover production and consumption for all ten countries, and the figures you report are generally accurate. The overview identifies China as the leader and Korea as the lowest, while the body includes useful comparisons such as China’s 5,398 versus 5,322 billion kWh and the United States’ 4,099 versus 3,866. However, the overview is limited: it does not highlight the large gap between the top two countries and the rest, or the general pattern that production exceeds consumption in most countries. Germany is a notable exception, with consumption (582.5) above production (526.6), but this contrast is only listed rather than interpreted. A clearer overview of these main patterns, supported by selective figures, would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an overview followed by two body paragraphs that group the countries and report their figures. This gives the reader a workable route through the information. However, progression within the paragraphs is mostly a sequence of data rather than a comparison of the main patterns. Connectors such as “Initially,” “Secondly,” and “Ultimately” are repetitive and do not clearly explain how the groups relate to one another. Some links are also awkward, as in “while, consumption,” and the overview runs directly into “In addition” without clear punctuation. Organise the body around meaningful comparisons—for example, the two leading countries, the middle group, and Germany’s exception—and use linking phrases to show those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and the country names and units make the data understandable. However, the range of descriptive language is limited, and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “top ten for the production,” “second proportion,” and “consumption of record.” Repeatedly using “production of electricity was” and “consumption of electricity was” also makes the report sound formulaic. There are spelling and presentation slips, including “Furtheremore” and inconsistent spacing around figures. Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as “ranked second,” “stood at,” and “exceeded,” and vary the language used to compare the two measures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses joined by “while” and “whereas,” so there is some structural variety. However, errors in articles, agreement, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “the China has” uses an unnecessary article, while “United States has second proportion” lacks a natural grammatical construction. In “The Russian and Japan production,” the country names do not form a correct possessive or modifier, and “the consumption of electricity was 1,038 … and 856.7 billion” leaves the second figure without a clear unit. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and commas placed awkwardly before “consumption.” Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns and check each clause for a clear subject, verb, and complete measurement.

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