Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the highest ten countries for the productivity and consumption of electricity in 2014.

In general, the variety of electricity were consumed in various countries, China is the highest used of electricity than other countries in 2014. But the categories of electricity utilized in Korea extremely lower than other countries.

In 2014, the production of electricity was consumed 5,398 billion kwh in china and it was highet level, while the consumption of electricity was used 5,322 at second level. United States, the produce of electricity was kept at different location 4,099, and consumtion of light used 3,866.

Rusia and Japan, the production and consumption were at a slightly similar levels in 2014 1,057, 1038, 936.2 and 856.7 billions. After a few years, the production and consumption of electricity were declined in Canada, France and Brazil into 2014. In Canada and France, the consumption and production were lower than other countries 618.9, 499.9, also 561.2, 462.9 billions in 2014.

In Korea, the electricity vanished in 2014, and it was extremely lower than nine countries, these was 485.1 and 449.5 in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, including China’s production and consumption and the United States’ values. You also recognise that China is the largest producer and consumer, and that Korea is among the lowest. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: Korea is not uniquely “extremely lower,” since several countries have similar figures, and Germany’s consumption (582.5) is higher than its production (526.6), a notable exception that is omitted. The response also describes electricity as “declined” in Canada, France and Brazil, although the chart compares countries in one year rather than showing a change over time. Select the main comparisons accurately and summarise them clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has paragraphs and a broadly sensible movement from an introduction to an overview and then country details. Some linking words, such as “In general,” “while” and “After,” show an attempt to connect information. However, progression is difficult to follow because comparisons are grouped inconsistently and some sentences combine several figures without clearly identifying which belong to production or consumption. For example, the Russia and Japan figures are presented in one sequence, while the Canada and France sentence is similarly crowded. “After a few years” also disrupts the organisation because the chart gives data for 2014 only. Group countries by meaningful comparisons and use clear references to each series.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “countries” and “levels,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated or inaccurate expressions that sometimes obscure meaning. “Productivity” is not the right term for electricity generation, and “the electricity vanished” does not describe a low figure. Phrases such as “highest used of electricity” and “the produce of electricity was kept at different location” are also unnatural. Spelling errors such as “highet,” “consumtion” and “Rusia” further reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of chart verbs and comparison phrases, and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast with “while” and clauses beginning “In general” and “After a few years.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “the variety of electricity were consumed” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “the production of electricity was consumed 5,398” uses an incorrect verb pattern. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in china” and “these was 485.1 and 449.5.” Practise accurate comparison structures such as “Production was X, while consumption was Y,” and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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