Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the ten leading nations for the production and consumtion of electricity in 2014.Overall,China produced more power and as well consumed the highest electricity in all the nations while germany and Korea generated and used the least amount of power respectively.Notably rate at which power was produced and used in Russia was relatively stable.

To begin with, China was the leading country in the generation and consumption of its enegy.Despite china being the top most country, the rate of production and use differ slightly its generation was 5398(billion KWh) while its cosumption was 5322 billions(KWh),moreover Republic of Korea was among the lowest consuming and producing country with its enery amounting to 449.5 billions (KWh)and485billion( KWh)respectively.

Further,Russia was ranked the third state in its generation and use of electricity.it is noted that it is the only country that achieved its stability based on the use and production of energy. the values were as follows, electricity generated 1,057 billion (KWh) and use1038 billion(KWh).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main leaders and include accurate figures for China and Russia, and you note that Russia’s production and consumption are close. However, the overview is only partly effective: Germany is not among the lowest in both measures, since its consumption (582.5 billion kWh) exceeds its production and is higher than several countries’ figures. Korea is the lowest consumer, but not the lowest producer; its production is 485.1, below which no listed country falls, so it is the lowest producer too. More importantly, the response reports only three countries and omits the United States, the second-largest producer and consumer, as well as the broad contrast between the top two and the remaining countries. Select a wider range of key comparisons and make the overview fully accurate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs about China/Korea and Russia. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Further” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is limited because the body discusses only a few countries and does not group or compare the remaining data. Some linking is mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is occasionally unclear, particularly in the long sentence beginning “Despite china being the top most country.” Punctuation and spacing also make boundaries harder to follow. Organise the body around clear comparisons—for example, the two leading countries, then the mid-ranking group and the lower figures—and use linking expressions only where they clarify those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “generation,” “leading,” and “ranked,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. There is some variation in how you refer to electricity. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “consumtion,” “enegy,” and “cosumption” are misspelled, while “stability” is not a natural description of two figures being close. Phrases such as “top most country” and “lowest consuming and producing country” are also awkward or imprecise. Aim for accurate, conventional collocations and check spelling carefully; expressions such as “the largest producer and consumer” and “production and consumption were similar” would communicate the data more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Despite” and clauses linked with “while.” The main comparisons are usually understandable, but some sentences contain errors in structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “Despite china being the top most country, the rate of production and use differ slightly its generation was…” joins ideas without a clear grammatical connection, and “the only country that achieved its stability” has an unclear clause structure. In “Korea was among the lowest consuming and producing country,” the singular noun does not agree with the plural idea. Use shorter, controlled sentences when reporting figures, and check sentence boundaries, articles, and singular/plural agreement.

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