Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the information of top 10 countries for the consumption and production of electricity in the year 2014. The statistics are given in billions kilo watt hour (kWh).

Overall, it is evident that china is considerably number one ranked in comparison to other countries. Meanwhile, China's electricity production consist of 5398 billion kWh and its consumption include 5322 which is similar to its production. Moreover, United states placed at number two ranked, its production of electricity is 4099 billion kWh and similarly its consumption in much lower which is 3866 billion in kWh.

The Russia, japan and India has similar in figures which is 1057 billion kWh production of Russia, 936.2 billion kWh production of japan and 698.8 billion kWh production of India. Consequently, theirs consumption of electricity is much lower than others countries. Alternatively, The production of Brazil, Germany and Korea has similar.

Furthermore, Korea at number 10 ranked due to its lower production and consumption of electricity in year 2014. Moreover, Japan shows subsequently higher performance in Asian countries listed in bar chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two leading countries and give several accurate figures, including China’s production and consumption and the United States’ values. This shows relevant understanding of the chart. However, the response only partially selects and reports the main features: the overview focuses on China and the US, while the remaining comparisons are vague or inaccurate. For example, India’s production is given as 698.8, which is actually its consumption, and the statement that Russia, Japan and India have similar figures overlooks the large differences between Russia and the other two. You also miss the notable exception of Germany, where consumption exceeds production. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons across the full set of countries would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and uses signposting such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “Furthermore,” so there is some organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph combines an overview with detailed figures, and the later paragraphs move between country groups without a clear comparison plan. Phrases such as “Consequently” and “Alternatively” do not clearly express the relationship between the ideas that follow them. Some references are also difficult to follow, particularly “theirs consumption” and “others countries.” Organise the report into a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons—for example, the two leading producers, the middle-ranking countries, and the lower figures—and use linking words only where their meaning is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranked” and “billion kWh,” and the main topic remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the information of top 10 countries,” “considerably number one ranked” and “higher performance.” Repetition of “Moreover” and “electricity” also limits flexibility. Some choices obscure the intended comparison: “similar” is used for figures that differ substantially, and “much lower than others countries” is unclear. Aim for precise reporting language such as “ranked first,” “accounted for,” “exceeded” and “was broadly comparable to,” choosing terms that match the data. Check spelling and capitalisation of country names as well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses introduced by “Meanwhile” and “which,” but control is inconsistent and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “China's electricity production consist,” where the verb does not agree with the subject, and “The Russia, japan and India has similar in figures,” which has problems with articles, agreement and sentence structure. The construction “its consumption in much lower” also lacks the required verb form. Articles, plurals and punctuation are not consistently controlled. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Russia produced 1,057 billion kWh, slightly more than it consumed.” Use a mix of these reliable structures before attempting longer sentences.

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