Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart displays the detailed analysis about the productionn and consumption of electricity by the high ten countries in the period of 2014.

Overall, the high power generation can be seen in the country of China, also the usage of electricity is in high propotion in the bar of the China. The Korea is in the place of decreased amount of using electricity and marginal amount of production can be seen in this place as well.

To begin with, all ten countries shows the data of making electricity as well as the its consumption. In this race, China won the race of producing the amount of 5,398 electricity and consuming the huge amount of 5,322, where as Koria is in the last position with 485.1 making and 449.5 using the electricity. By comparing this given recource we can say that the China is a big country which not only produce the big amount of electricity but also consume it according to their use.

The second one in this race is United States with 4,099 production and 3,866 consumption of electricity. There is slightly change found in the dijits of using and making electrity by the Russia and Japan. Other countries have fluctuated change in dijits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s main leaders accurately: China has the highest production and consumption, while Korea is lowest in both, and you include several correct figures for these countries and the United States. However, the summary is only partial because it gives little meaningful comparison across the remaining countries. The statement that Russia and Japan show a “slightly change” is vague, and “Other countries have fluctuated change” does not explain the pattern. Germany is also an important exception: its consumption (582.5) exceeds production (526.6), unlike the general pattern, but this is not reported. Focus the overview on the large gap between the top two countries and the much lower figures elsewhere, then select a few accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “The second one” signal movement between points. However, progression is limited because the details are not grouped or compared systematically; the final paragraph moves from the United States to Russia and Japan, then ends with a broad statement about “Other countries.” Repeated race language (“In this race,” “won the race”) also makes the links feel mechanical rather than analytical. Organise the body by meaningful comparisons—for example, the two leading countries, then the lower-ranked group—and use clear references to connect each figure to its country and measure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “amount,” and “comparing,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “high ten countries,” “high propotion,” “making electricity,” and “fluctuated change.” Repeated expressions such as “amount” and “race” also reduce precision. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “productionn,” “Koria,” “dijits,” and “electrity,” which can distract the reader. Build a more precise set of chart-description terms, such as “ranked,” “recorded,” “stood at,” and “exceeded,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “By comparing this given recource we can say…” and the sentence contrasting China with Korea. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts awkward or unclear. For example, “all ten countries shows” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the its consumption” contains an incorrect determiner. The opening phrase “in the period of 2014” is also not formed naturally, and “where as Koria is in the last position with 485.1 making” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the figures and the actions. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then add complex clauses while checking agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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