Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the electricity production and consumption for top 10 ratted countries in the year 2014.

overall, the countries include: China, US, Russia, Japan, India, Canda, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea. The first rank is China in both production and consumption of electricity, while Korea is the lowest in the rank of electricity generation and consumption.

China and United States record the highest figure in production as well as consumption. China has produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh. Whereas, US has generated just over 4,000 billion kWh and used around 3,800 billion kWh. Russia has presented equal rates in both production and consumption. Furthermore, Japan has record figure in production around 930 billion and consume just under 850 billion kWh.

India has recored rate in production around 870 billion while consumption is lower than this. France , Brazil and Germany have similar value in both generation and consumption approximately 500 billion kWh. Moreover, Korea has ranked the lowest among all the countries with production of electricity above 480 billion and consumption around 450 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: China leads both measures, while Korea is lowest. You also report several key figures accurately, including China’s production and consumption and approximate values for the United States and Japan. However, coverage of the comparisons is incomplete and some details are unclear or inaccurate. Russia’s figures are not equal (1,057 versus 1,038), and Germany is grouped with countries at about 500 billion kWh even though its consumption is 582.5 billion. The overview could also highlight the large gap between the top two countries and the rest. Select the most important contrasts and report them precisely, including Germany’s unusual consumption figure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the countries, and paragraph breaks help separate these functions. Some linking words, such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover,” show an attempt to connect information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is not consistently clear: the account moves from Russia to Japan, then India, and then groups France, Brazil and Germany without a clear organising principle. “Whereas” also begins a sentence fragment after the China figures. Use a consistent grouping, such as the two leading countries followed by the remaining countries, and connect comparisons within complete sentences. This would make the organisation easier to follow and reduce the impression of a list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “generated,” “used,” and “figure,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision. “Top 10 ratted countries” is an inaccurate phrase, while “Russia has presented equal rates” does not naturally describe the figures and is also factually misleading. There are spelling errors such as “Canda” and “recored,” and “record figure” is not an appropriate collocation in this context. Aim for accurate, natural reporting language and check spelling; alternatives such as “ranked,” “recorded,” and “similar levels” would make the description clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the intended comparisons can be understood. However, errors occur often enough to make some sentences awkward or incomplete. For example, “Whereas, US has generated…” is a dependent clause used as a sentence, and “Japan has record figure … and consume” has problems with article use and parallel verb forms. The overview begins with lowercase “overall,” and punctuation around commas is inconsistent. Practise joining contrast clauses to a main clause and keeping verb forms parallel, for example, “Japan produced about 936 billion kWh and consumed about 857 billion.” More consistent sentence control would make the information easier to read.

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