Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The Bar chart illustrates the usage of electricity for 10 different countries in the year 2014 where the production and consumption is in billion kwh.

Overall, it can be observed that China stands on the top rank as number 1 to produce and consume the power in billion kwh, whereas Korea Rep is the lowest which is ranked 10 for the given period of time.And Germany is the only country that consumed more electricity than it produced.

Firstly, as given China produced 5398 billion electricity and consumed 5322 billion units, Second is the United states that showed a slight lower rate of consumption 3866 bill. units and produced 4099 bill units, the third is Russia which shows 1057 produced and 1038 comsumed, continuing with the fourth country Japan 936.2 produced and 856.7 consumed, India producion 871 and consuming 698.8 units , Canada producing 618.9 units and using 499.9 units.

From the seventh country the rate of production is less than 600 billion units where the country France produced 561.2 units and consumed 462.9 units,Brazil producing 530.7 units and consumed 455.8 units, whereas Germany produced 526.6 units and consumed 582.5 units and the last country is Korea.rep which produced 485.1 units and consumed 449.5 units

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China leads both production and consumption, Korea is lowest, and Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. The figures you report for the countries are generally consistent with the chart, and the overview gives the reader a useful summary. You also cover all ten countries. However, some comparisons are reported as a sequence of individual figures rather than being selected and grouped to highlight the most important contrasts. For example, the very large gap between China and the United States and the much lower figures for the remaining countries could be made more explicit. The overview could also summarise the general relationship between production and consumption across most countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs presenting the figures. The progression from the highest-ranked countries to the lower-ranked ones is easy to follow, and sequencing expressions such as “Firstly,” “Second,” and “From the seventh country” help signal this order. However, the body reads largely as a list, so comparisons between countries are not developed as clearly as they could be. Some linking is mechanical, and the long final paragraph combines several countries without enough sentence breaks. Improve cohesion by grouping countries with similar patterns and using comparison links such as “by contrast” or “while,” while keeping each sentence focused on a clear comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart’s subject, including “production,” “consumed,” “rank,” and “rate.” The meaning is generally clear, but word choice and collocation are sometimes imprecise or repetitive. For instance, “usage of electricity” is less suitable than “electricity production and consumption,” and “stands on the top rank” is an awkward way to describe China’s position. Abbreviations such as “bill. units” are also too informal for an IELTS report, while “comsumed” and “produccion” show spelling or word-form errors. Aim for precise, consistent terms such as “generated,” “consumed,” and “billion kWh,” and avoid repeating “produced” and “units” when a concise comparison would be clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main information remains understandable. However, some grammatical and punctuation errors recur. For example, “the production and consumption is” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “China produced 5398 billion electricity” lacks a suitable grammatical construction for the unit. Several sentences are joined with commas, particularly the long sequence beginning “From the seventh country,” which makes sentence boundaries unclear. Capitalisation and spacing after full stops are also inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences when listing figures, check agreement and articles, and punctuate country comparisons carefully. These changes would make your varied sentence attempts more controlled and easier to read.

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