Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graph represents the production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014 by the top 10 countries.

There are 10 countries who contribute in production of energy and even consumption of it including of countries such as China, US, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea.

The main feature that we can see in the diagram is that China is marked as the first among all the countries as it has the highest production of energy with about 5,398 kWh and also with more consumption of energy as well with about 5,322 kWh. The second highest contribution for production and consumption of electricity is United States with about 4,099 kWh, and 3,866 kWh.

The other countries also have there contribution but not upto the level of China and US as they have the highest production of electricity and also have the highest percentage of consumption of electricity and the lowest contribution is done by Korea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report the leading figures accurately: China produces about 5,398 billion kWh and consumes 5,322, while the United States is second at 4,099 and 3,866. You also note Korea as the lowest producer. However, the response only partially summarises the data: most of the other countries are grouped together without meaningful comparisons, and the overview does not capture the general pattern that production exceeds consumption in nearly all countries, with Germany the exception. The claim that Korea has the lowest contribution is also too broad, since Germany’s consumption is lower than Korea’s. Select a few further comparisons, including this exception, to make the main features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, understandable sequence: it introduces the chart, names the countries, then discusses China and the United States before making a general closing statement. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages. However, progression is limited because the country list in the second paragraph adds little, and the final paragraph repeats that China and the US lead rather than developing a new comparison. Linking is also sparse, and phrases such as “The other countries also have there contribution” do not clearly connect the remaining data to the main points. Organise the body around comparisons—for example, the two leading countries, the middle group, and the lowest figures—and use clear references to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “production,” “consumption,” “highest,” and “contribution.” The country names and key terms are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise: “contribution” is used where “output” or “figure” would be more natural, and “highest percentage of consumption” is inaccurate because the chart gives amounts, not percentages. “There contribution” also contains a spelling error, while “not upto the level” is informal and awkward for an academic summary. Use precise terms such as “electricity generation,” “consumption,” and “billion kWh,” and vary the language used to compare values.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the main points using mostly simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to combine ideas using “as” and “with.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but the range is limited and errors recur. For example, “There are 10 countries who contribute” uses an unsuitable relative pronoun for countries, and “China is marked as the first … as it has” is an awkwardly constructed sentence. In “The other countries also have there contribution,” the possessive form should be “their”; “including of countries” also has an unnecessary preposition. Practise accurate comparative sentence structures, such as “China produced more electricity than it consumed,” and check agreement, pronouns, and sentence construction when editing.

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